A Mile Or Two Undone

she wears the blues
   like well worn shoes                           

   they got her this far

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Ronald A. Williams

Date: 3/24/2019 1:22:00 PM

A cute picture indeed.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/26/2019 6:13:00 AM

Ah, I know her also! And she loves those shoes!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/26/2019 7:09:00 AM

Her dancing shoes ;) xomo!

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 2/25/2019 8:04:00 PM

I love this poem, and her tattered coat hides her pain....

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/26/2019 7:10:00 AM

...her coat of many colours ;) xomo!

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 2/24/2019 5:14:00 PM

Love this one, Mo ... nice. <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/24/2019 7:20:00 PM

Thank you my friend. Was inspired listening to the blues~ xomo <3

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/24/2019 12:45:00 PM

and they're comfortable! Aloha! Rico

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/24/2019 7:19:00 PM

You know they are ;) xomo!

Heidi Sands

Date: 2/24/2019 7:59:00 AM

Great one Maureen :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/24/2019 8:21:00 AM

Thank you Heidi :) xomo!

Jeff Connelly

Date: 2/24/2019 7:47:00 AM

So haikuish. 5 5 5. Very few words needed to express a long lasting image. But may I pose a question Maureen? Is a title needed? You know I love your haiku, but traditionally they never had a title. As in this poem, the title becomes, at least to me, the first line of the poem. And since it has six syllables doesn't really fit. But then I suppose it's not meant too. Early morning pondering Maureen. You've got me thinking, and that can be a dangerous thing. jajaja. Still, another wonderful poem

Jeff Connelly
Date: 2/24/2019 10:53:00 PM

I agree Maureen, but what amazes me is that your titles could be one line poems by themselves. From an admirer.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 2/24/2019 8:15:00 AM

Haikuish a compliment, thank you! I do title like a first line, a habit of mine. For me, especially writing short form as I most often do, the title is 'half' the poem. It is the door, the sign on the door, the set up, a little poem can be more complex playing off the title. I don't worry bout syllables in free form, I go by feel. Cheers! :) xomo!