A Mermaid and Three Fishermen - Retourne Form

(Retourne is a French poetry form wherein repetition is used. It consists of four quatrains (four-line stanzas), with each line having eight syllables. The trick is though that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first) A mermaid met three fisherman She was pleased to offer a wish The wish differed considerably Not happy for wishes granted. She was pleased to offer a wish To the first fisherman in line He asked to double his I.Q Started quoting Keats with surprise. Wish differed considerably Of the second fisherman when He asked to triple his I.Q. Started predicting tsunami. Not happy for the wishes granted The third fisherman thought deeply Asked to quadruple his I.Q. Turned into a woman by her.
+++++++ March 28, 2014 Form: Retourne not on PS so entered as Verse Form Dr. Ram Mehta Third Place Win Contest: Dabbling in poetry forms by gautami Phookan
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Poteet Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 9:35 PM
I love the surprise ending...Congratulations on your creativity here. The retourne serves as a form for emphasis. Well-done, Dr. Ram.
Deschler Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 6:13 PM
This was a very interesting poem, written in a unique form. I did enjoy reading it tonight. Well done, Dr. Ram. Congratulations on your win, as well!
A   Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 5:48 PM
awesome win...PD
Phookan Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 6:25 AM
Aha! This is one that I loved so much and such a fine form 'Retourne', and so wise and sagacious this- Cute fishermen poem :) puts a smile on my face. Thank you Dr Ram for entering it, always an honor to have you grace my contest! Huge Congrats on your fine win!! Regards..
Stephens Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 4:25 AM
Hi Ram, Congrats on your win. Enjoyable read. Regards Theresa xx
A  Avatar
April 2, 2014 at 12:10 AM
DR:) Congratulations, ON YOUR WIN ~SKAT~
Dom Avatar
April 1, 2014 at 10:54 PM
Hey Dr Mehta, this is an interesting form you've shown me. Congratulations on your glory. Cheers!
A  Avatar
March 27, 2014 at 10:38 PM
ha-ha, thank you for the smiles DR. . Hugs ~SKAT~
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