A Matter of Discontent

When I have finished with this body
And hopefully ascend the heavenly stair,
I'm going to go into Heaven's workshop
And have a word with the management there.

I've not been too happy with their merchandise.
I feel I didn't receive of their best.
Perhaps I got one of the rejects.
Well it wasn't as good as some of the rest!

Oh the model was alright to begin with,
Then little flaws began to show.
Perhaps it was assembled by a -non peace- worker.
Or maybe an illegal immigrant from-down below-.

However it 's been of very poor quality.
It's needed alot of repair.
Another thing it creases too easily
It's got wrinkles everywhere.

Also the materials too stretchy,
It goes baggy after alot of use.
Needs to stand up better to stress and strain
Can't seem to take alot of abuse.

And if it gets a hole in it
It really is a pain!!
Oh you can repair it, stitch it up
But it's never quite the same again.

I also want to discuss style.
Sorry, I feel the design isn't up to scratch.
I want to know for example,
Why tops and bottoms just don't match?

I've noticed on quite a few models
Proportions all up the wall,
Overdone at the top,hips flared too much.
And I don't go for the pear shape at all!!!

Also I wanted to always look good in it,
Perhaps that's rather vain.
Well at least be comfortable with it
And not have cause to complain.

Some say I might get a replacement.
If I do one things for sure,
I'll check it out thoroughly next time
Before it leaves the production floor.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Milgate Avatar
November 26, 2010 at 11:28 AM
This is just great! Love, it. Love, it. So true, but so well done. Rhyming very good so natural. Wow!
Docherty Avatar
November 23, 2010 at 12:23 AM
Yeh! A marvel of a write, reallye njoyed the humor within despite the serious side to it all... Well done this is really, really cleverly thoght out! Kindest thoughts, Anna-Marie.
Neels Avatar
November 7, 2010 at 12:01 AM
June, thanks for te laughs this morning with this witty write ;) love Wilma
Chappell Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 9:21 PM
i love this peace my friend
Oimbo Avatar
November 1, 2010 at 9:53 AM
i like it so much, the poem.the cynicism in it makes me wonder
Hilliker Avatar
October 27, 2010 at 6:57 PM
lol. Very funny and clever. I loved it!
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October 26, 2010 at 1:15 PM
"You can stitch it up again"...but it's never the same. My hip replacement thanks you for your sympathies! Lots of fun, this one June. And I wanted to thank you for your kindly comment on my first poem in PoetrySoup, The Lunch Box, about the school bus at the checkpoint. I've got a rhymed medieval-themed poem posted today, and I hope you like it. I apologize for the use of occasional obsolete verbiage...they fit the theme and work for me! ~Brian
Guzzi Avatar
October 25, 2010 at 4:43 PM
what an excellent smile you gave me, I needed that! Hope you're having a great afternoon! Light & Love
Cavanagh Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 4:11 PM
Hi June, Thanks for your kind messages, i really appreciate them! :) I'm a builder by trade and this really is totally new to me, so your messages are very welcome! I hope my writing didn't come across as 'anti religion', that wasn't my intention at all. Just the random musings of a bored mind! Lol. Anyway, Im glad you liked my poems (not sure If you were just being kind lol) but thanks anyway. Lee P.s, Sorry for spamming your poem, wasn't sure how to message you directly.
Hall Mad Poet Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 2:53 PM
Hey I thought I was the funny one here? hehe just kidding this is funny I'll send you the hospital bill.
Devonshire Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 1:56 PM
I'll be right behind you in filing my complaint, Sylvia (June). Had a great laugh thinking about all of your complaints. If you do succeed in getting a replacement, please let us know how you did it. I'm ready to trade in my body too. LOL Love, Carolyn
Mehta Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 1:05 PM
Very humorous write with nice flow images about the low quality merchandise, Sylvia. This goes to my fav.
Haick Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 12:36 PM
Seriously funny!! I enjoyed this witty verse so much, it brought much laughter to me today! Thank you for sharing this great poem..Thanks to you and Wilma for making me laugh today!! Love, always, Audrey
Culverhouse Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:54 AM
Funny story!! Enjoyed yep I needed a sturdier model also, more durable. LOL
Roberts Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:48 AM
that was wonderful
Cavanagh Avatar
October 24, 2010 at 11:41 AM
Nothing deep and insightful from me i'm afraid, but I enjoyed this....very clever! :)
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