A Love Story

I loved
She laughed
I cried
She mocked my advances
I lowered my head in shame
She walked out of my life forever
I died
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 4/4/2015 6:59:00 AM
Absolutely wonderful! Its a blessed and wonderful weekend for me, chilling out with poetic lines so fine and touching
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 9:47:00 PM
Thank you so much Funom
Date: 3/28/2015 1:27:00 PM
If not for the pic, I would have cried too...thank you for including it then. Another 7. Such incredible talent. Why are you not posting lately? Happy to see your avatar today, though. :)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 9:47:00 PM
I am a clown even in death!
Date: 3/26/2015 10:34:00 PM
The death of the heart. I know what that feels like, but I am still hangin' on and tomorrow is a new day... Great expression in so few lines. Nice work, Arthur!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 9:46:00 PM
Well if you ever wanna meet a dead man, gimme a ring!
Date: 3/23/2015 6:39:00 PM
I think you figured out that picture dead on. As dark as is this write I have to admit the wheels of your mind turning gave me a chuckle as well as made my spine tingle!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 9:46:00 PM
Sometimes I think I am driving with a flat tire!! :)
Date: 3/17/2015 1:05:00 AM
Wow the picture is worth a thousand words! The kind of pain too many can understand, but a person like the one you describe, she doesn't seem worth it...hugs, Rhonda
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 9:45:00 PM
Thanks Rhonda!!! :)
Date: 3/16/2015 3:48:00 PM
Arthur this is deep stuff and that photo is so dark and chilling but I like the poem and thanks for your comment on my poetry
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/16/2015 8:25:00 PM
Thank you too Broken Wings!
Date: 3/16/2015 9:50:00 AM
oh i know that very feeling were they hold your hands laugh and make promises to your family then cast you to the darkness beautifully crafted dear pal excellent lov e story bless you in your heart of love arthur wishing you a blessed beautiful st patricks day
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/16/2015 8:24:00 PM
Thank you liam, cheers!
Date: 3/16/2015 7:25:00 AM
ahh such your style, nicely done. hugsxx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/16/2015 8:24:00 PM
Thank you Cas, nice to hear from someone who has such style!!!
Date: 3/15/2015 11:36:00 PM
Very nice pen Arthur! That's one hell of a love story gone very bad you've paint us here, my dear friend. That very dramatic picture enhance it to. Very sad poem! Really sorry about it since is not fictional. A 7 from me. Wishing you a lovely day! In his light! God bless you! :) D.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 3/15/2015 11:38:00 PM
Thank you kindly Dorian!
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