A Long Shadow

Slipping into shapes sun drips streams 'round darkest depth and I, feeling small, find even smallest ants cast shadows long 'neath vast blue skies.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/9/2015 11:04:00 PM

I agree with Maurice. Way to attack the challenge. you killed it!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 1/9/2015 6:29:00 AM

Great way to attack this difficult challenge.

David Meade

Date: 1/4/2015 10:19:00 PM

Even about bugs your words are lovely, colorful, and gentle. Hope your new year is off to a good start.

Gary Bateman

Date: 1/4/2015 5:24:00 PM

Rhonda, Beautifully done!! I really like the ". . . ant's shadow cast long under vast blue sky." Exquisitely depicted!! Best Always, Gary (P.S. And a "7" too!!)

John Fleming

Date: 1/4/2015 10:16:00 AM

An interesting little thought, Rhonda! :) john.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/4/2015 9:06:00 AM

You have captured the bigness of small!

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 1/4/2015 8:32:00 AM

oh boy Rhonda, well penned, good luck in the contest

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/4/2015 7:03:00 AM

Cute one..I have read another one similar so must be a contest..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go.,Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/4/2015 5:04:00 AM

Rhonda please check contest rules again. I think "smallest ants cast long shadows"- the whole line should be used somewhere in the poem.Pl check and confirm. This is an extremely good one. A perfect 10.Love. Brilliant exposition Rhonda. My fav.Rajat

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen

Date: 1/4/2015 3:35:00 AM

Wishes for the contest,long shadow dear poet Saunders.