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A Long, Dark Road

The silence between them is visually keen
while the sound from the tires is picking up speed

With her head turned away, she is called to the window
where poles along the roadside cast ominous shadows
The drone of the highway is all that transcends 
and has filled up the muteness with apocalypse winds

Far down the freeway, nestled like hives
are the small housing tracts, tiny houses alive
Burning the night like unreachable stars

She imagines a couple, sharing a table
sharing their day, while children would play 
Where every small thing, was sorted and labeled 
Where people shared dinner, together are able,
to know with assurance that nothing will change

Her hands in her lap, and fingers are numb
Bemused she will wonder where her body has gone
All the signs, silhouetted, seem depleted, alone
The sound of the road is a sorrowful song
She takes a deep breath, as the car travels on 
There's a sound of a sigh, and a world passing by
The road going home....is a road that is long


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Submitted for the contest: Melancholy 
Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron

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Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Zubair Avatar
September 30, 2016 at 5:51 PM
A beautiful gasping write of vivid memories. Congratulations on your win.
Haight Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 3:21 PM
Such a sad poem, Carrie. The 'melancholy' comes alive along this 'long, dark road.' Congratulations on your well-deserved First Place win. Hugs, Sandra
Daniel Avatar
September 28, 2016 at 3:12 AM
Very sad write, apt for this contest, I love the last line, Carrie:) Congratulations on your top win:)
Rodrigues Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 9:01 PM
Congratulations, Carrie!
Godwin Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 8:40 PM
To me, this is excellent. I am no longer surprised when I find myself in your poems, my undefined feelings expressed as though you sorted the lines from my private wonderments. Nope, not surprised any longer, but awed, amazed and, I think, grateful. Your writes often serve me as only poetry can and is, at its best, intended to do. FAV ... 7 ... Appreciation ... CayCay
Medders Tobechi Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 12:58 PM
This is a very lonely poem. You can feel it because it is well written a 7.
Arnone Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 11:41 AM
Sad, reflective car ride with scenery so instructive. Nice write, Carrie. Congrats! :-)
Negron Flores Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 9:45 AM
Congratulations Carrie on the placement of the contest
Scars Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 9:41 AM
Carrie, this is perfect for this theme, I am so glad to read this...Congrats on your well deserved top placement :)-luloo
Suzadail Jr. Avatar
May 30, 2016 at 9:34 PM
Another winner? I'm not surprised. Congrats.
A  Avatar
November 10, 2015 at 11:36 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your awesome win. SKAT
Wigley Avatar
November 9, 2015 at 10:23 PM
Love the bleak feel to this, Carrie. We're all being taken somewhere, and the destination is not necessarily of our choosing. Great write. Well done. Viv x
Lamoureux Avatar
November 9, 2015 at 6:42 PM
Congratulations! One of the best.
Lindley Avatar
November 5, 2015 at 7:01 PM
A truly fine poem that sets deep images to ponder. Life and its fears are with us all and the great fear of our fateful, ending day travels with us daily. A7
A   Avatar
November 5, 2015 at 1:06 AM
enjoyed this write Carry, good luck in the contest, ~Luv Linda
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