A Life Taken Too Soon

Rosy sky turns into gray Between columns of a day; Piercing hours like arrowed spires To mirror my lost desires… Babe groaning heaving thin air Thoughts lonely sing of despair: And clouds hide incessant grief My toddler meeting life’s thief— How finale chafes inked night Through rush of incessant flight. For Laura Loo’s Contest: 10 Lines 5 Words lll 3/18/2017

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Date: 4/9/2018 10:20:00 PM
A very touching poem, nette. Congrats on your podium finish.
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Date: 3/30/2018 4:54:00 AM
Blessings and sincere congratulations on your fine win, Nette - all the best to you, my friend! :-)
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Date: 3/21/2018 6:27:00 AM
beautiful rhythm and rhyme sweet lady, lovely poem thank you and congrats :)-luloo
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Date: 3/19/2018 10:13:00 AM
Magnificent , Nette, you make this flow as natural as the sea... Luck in the contest... hugs
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Date: 3/18/2018 10:22:00 AM
This is just brilliant, great use of the words..
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Date: 3/17/2018 9:27:00 PM
well done poet seems we chose the same topic, I believe yours is better
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Date: 3/17/2018 4:56:00 PM
This is heart wrenching and beautifully written! It reaches the reader deeply. Well done! :)
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Date: 3/17/2018 3:34:00 PM
- My eyes are filled with tears .... deeply touching, Nette - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/17/2018 1:46:00 PM
Your heartfelt depiction touches heart..well written as always..sad, but eloquent ..best for a win, nette.
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Date: 3/17/2018 1:42:00 PM
Such depths of sadness so gracefully and beautifully expressed Nette. Poignant poetic lines lifts your heartfelt and emotional write through tears to heavenly heights. Best wishes for a win!
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