Gregory Richard Barden Poet Monorhyme

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A Just Rain

Beneath lamenting Payne's Gray skies
Shin-deep you wade your puddled lies
That weep from words in garish guise
To drown the embers once your prize
Like poison purpose - saddened sighs
Stale tears that leak from empty eyes
Yet christen those sweet fools, unwise
Like me who feign their somber highs
Though love, one jester's just demise
Once cursed the wind on which it flies
Hence you, and your tall, tangled tries  
Can choke ... on all your compromise.





~ 1st Place ~  in the "Strand Select 12, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

~ 1st Place ~  in the "First Time Here - Any Monorhyme" Poetry Contest, William Kekaula, Judge & Sponsor.

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Brenda Chiri January 18, 2020 at 2:46 PM Gregory congratulations on your top win!;)

Agnes Krampe January 17, 2020 at 6:52 AM Fabulous creative monorhyme! Congrats on your win.

Sam Kauffman January 17, 2020 at 1:26 AM Well you've done it again with this poem that explores unrequitted love with simplicity, elegance and wonderful images. Congratulations! Gregory Richard Barden January 17, 2020 at 2:24 AM Oh, thanks so much, Sam, your comments always carry added weight with me, and I'm very happy you found my poem enjoyable. Blessings, my friend! :o)

William Kelii Kekaula January 15, 2020 at 2:57 PM An absorbing gem you have written my friend as I am familiarizing the nuances of a standard oppose to a premiere, my thanks for your participation and understanding Greg, and my compliments on your 1st place win~@wk Gregory Richard Barden January 17, 2020 at 2:23 AM Many kind thanks to you, William, I so greatly appreciate the wonderful placement, and I'm very happy you found my poem so worthwhile. Blessings, Friend! :o)

John Watt January 13, 2020 at 1:01 AM Gregory, your economy of words with maximum impact are a Master's course in poetry (yet again). I second the comments left before me, and add to the list of favorite lines - "that weep from words in garish guise". Might the title be a reference to "the rain falls on the just and the unjust"? Just wondering. Grace and peace ~ John Gregory Richard Barden January 17, 2020 at 2:21 AM Oh, this is very kind of you, John, and you know how much I value your opinion ... thanks so very much for the wonderful comments, My Friend. Blessings! :o)

Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 8:33 AM Such strong impassioned lines, Greg..."Though love, one jester's just demise Once cursed the wind on which it flies." Poetry in depths of emotion. Lin Lane January 12, 2020 at 12:25 PM We're usually on the same page in the book of emotional angst. Gregory Richard Barden January 12, 2020 at 11:51 AM Thanks so much, Lin - it's so nice that someone "gets" me here, and appreciates those extra layers. Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3