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A Humming Bird in My Garden

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December.10- 2023
Any Form, Any Theme Poetry Contest
Sponsor - Sotto Poet
~ Placed First~

 

Sudden, as a bolt from the blue, Came down a humming bird, tantalizing Skimming down and darting up As an ever revolving top It reeled round and round Before it alighted on a drooping flower; That hung from a bending branch In a corner of my front yard garden It precariously clung on to it Like a small pendent on a chain A sight so cool, now so rare That lighted up my dull spirits! Once they showed themselves up On almost every sunny day Promptly after the monsoon rains When the plants en mass in resplendent bloom Oh! How I love this tiny bird Not larger than a bumble bee Dressed in a cloak of green and black Flitting round on fluttering wings It literally dances and pirouettes in the air Before descending down closer to its target Swirling, gliding n’ moving back and forth As if unsure of what it should do Finally with a terrific jerk and swiveling move It hovers close to hanging blooms Balancing itself sans any support And draws out nectar with its long needle bill When the zephyrs carry a sweet scent It flits from flower to flower And having enjoyed the ambrosial treat It flies back, well satiated like a darting arrow My eyes fail to capture its lightning move As it goes whizzing through the lambent air Quickly disappearing like a mote of soot Losing itself in the vast expanse of the blue Being less than an ounce of fat So light, sleek and well streamlined It travels faster than the speed of light. In a fleeting dash, moving out of sight Can any other bird rival it in agility? Or vie with it in its simple grace? How cute, this spirit of ‘disembodied joy’ This winged diminutive denizen of the sky!
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Date: 12/11/2023 6:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I love the tiny humming birds. I love this beautiful write/picture. Have a blessed day writing away.......................
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Date: 12/10/2023 11:20:00 PM
Such a beautiful poem lovely Valsa. A well deserved first place. Congratulations. Best wishes from Wen
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Date: 12/10/2023 3:19:00 PM
Awesome tribute to this marvel of creation. My wife loves hummingbirds and yellow finches, both which visit her perennial flower gardens
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Date: 12/10/2023 12:07:00 PM
Told you it would finish first.. Congrats.
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Date: 12/10/2023 10:14:00 AM
What an exquisite and delectable poem! Poetry is the expression of our emotions and observations, and you have accomplished that so flawlessly in this piece. Numerous beautiful lines in your poem bring it to life. Congratulations on your 1st place contest win, Valsa
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Valsa George
Date: 12/10/2023 9:38:00 PM
Thanks a lot dear poet Lasaad for placing my poem in the top winner's list. Thanks also for the lovely comment.
Date: 12/10/2023 9:56:00 AM
I think no bird can rival it. One of God's most special of his bird collection!
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Date: 12/10/2023 9:56:00 AM
I think no bird can rival it. One of God's most special of his bird collection!
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Date: 12/10/2023 9:56:00 AM
I think no bird can rival it. One of God's most special of his bird collection!
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Date: 12/10/2023 7:23:00 AM
Such a lovely and delightful poem.. poetry is what we feel and what we see.. and you did that perfectly here.. so many lovely lines through your poem brining it to life.. The hummingbird is a beautiful bird with a sweet song just like your poem.. An excellent choice for the contest.. Good luck.
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Date: 12/10/2023 3:34:00 AM
Valsa George, dear friend, I can honestly say that you have been on my mind every day, firstly because of your loyal continuation following of my poems and your wonderful apt replies for comments. Secondly because your superb poem 'Wave and Shore ' was chosen as POTD your choice of your three poems were impeccable and i feel it is an honor, that your poem was chosen to appear on the first page of Poetry Soups ANTHOLOGY. Hugs and Blessings Jennifer
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Date: 12/10/2023 3:25:00 AM
I, also, enjoy seeing the hummers in spring and summer here. They are a delight to watch. I used to put out feeders to help them along during the warm months plus a number of flowers that they seemed to especially enjoy. Thanks for sharing your nice work with us. I enjoyed reading it. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara K
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Date: 12/9/2023 10:26:00 PM
Awwn, how wish I were that magical hummingbird, fluttering across the enchanting fragrances and swirling upon flowery petals! Gosh, this made me so spellbound and in awe of your creative quill, dear poetess.. The imageries, word play, detailed nuances and their colourful reveries.. Ah, everything just painted a poetic abode upon my heart's canvas. You're so incredibly talented and I'm one of your fans! "When the zephyrs carry a sweet scent", "Losing itself in the vast expanse of the blue" And
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/9/2023 10:28:00 PM
"It precariously clung on to it Like a small pendent on a chain" Just wowwww, best of luck to you for the contest!
Date: 12/9/2023 10:23:00 PM
I've heard of them and their graceful movements, sadly we don't have them in the uk. An enjoyable read Valsa, best of luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 12/9/2023 10:16:00 PM
This made my soul beam and swell with glee. How beautiful and descriptive is your way with words. I love poems like this to read on especially mornings. You are a very imaginative and creative writer. And this poem shows that too. Theres so many lines in this that stood out for me but “ When the zephyrs carry a sweet scent It flits from flower to flower“ that stanza stood out for me the most for the depth and brilliance of art, and what you’ve delivered through such eloquent lines. Fave. BOL
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