A Heart Lay Broken

A spirit flies alone there's no love true without saying goodbye 
soul searching deeply without sacrifice your gone 
walking golden sands inside the heart all wars are won 

Hand in hand slowly strolls on golden sands footprints left
as you're daylight played warm tricks our destiny ties us beyond
put under one spell lost in lonely you one beautiful memory

Drowning inside your Heaven drifting faraway tears
to hear the winds breathless whisper softly howls out your name
holding you dream magic as your voice enters feelings flow 

An aura of beauty appeared within reality coloring a rainbow
or was it just a figment of imagination never existing
strung along believing in something real 

Salted from the deep ocean waves crashing currents 
rising emotions turning tides weeping is it wrong for me in the scrapyard 
among'st twisted metal to want to hold you love one last time


(Terza Rima in unrhymed Tercet poetic format)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 2/28/2015 12:30:00 PM
captivating.. i just have to say how wonderful this work is! you bring in so many factors beyond yearning, liam.. huggs
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Date: 2/26/2015 11:53:00 AM
The conscious mind extends itself beyond our norms and we enter a world composed of reality defused with imagination where happiness is tentative and so precious as to awe us with its beauty and scare us with its fragility. Emile. #7
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Date: 2/26/2015 9:51:00 AM
Liam you write such beautiful poems.. :)! thanks for sharing and inspiring me as well. :)!God bless.. :)!//olive eloisa
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Date: 2/26/2015 12:03:00 AM
Good stuff old friend!
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 4/13/2015 3:23:00 PM
thank you ken dear pal always lovely to see you wishing you a blessed week
Date: 2/25/2015 7:32:00 AM
Beautiful and sad. I love the question at the end...is is wrong to want?
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 4/13/2015 3:18:00 PM
yeah monterey when someone hates it begs a question when love holds the power within wonderful comment dear friend thank you deeply
Date: 2/24/2015 9:21:00 PM
Just saying hello, as I came by to read this again, a very splendid poem indeed!
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 4/13/2015 3:11:00 PM
your so sweet arthur not around much these days pal wishing you a great week dear friend
Date: 2/23/2015 7:35:00 PM
superb Liam dear old pal love the flow and imagery in this enchanting pen hugs 7 fav
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 4/13/2015 2:53:00 PM
linda thank you pal for the wonderful comment wishing you a blessed week dear friend passing you a smile
Date: 2/23/2015 12:24:00 PM
Creative use of wording..Enjoyed reading your work today...Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 4/13/2015 2:42:00 PM
thank you ever so kindly sara for the beautiful comment sorry i am late with replies deeply appreciated dear friend
Date: 2/23/2015 8:46:00 AM
Liam, so emotional and deep, sadness is such a horrible prison to be in. Well penned a 7 Blessings sir
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 2:44:00 PM
it sure is eve captured in the grave of deep undying beauty wonderful comment dear pal bless you always wishing you a blessed beautiful st patricks day
Date: 2/23/2015 5:55:00 AM
Hey Liam!! "You Wild Old Leprechaun" -- I'm breaking momentarily from my self-imposed sabbatical here from working on my book edit for my publisher to comment on your quite marvelous Tercet write here. Your write is filled with much passion and emotion, and the imagery conveys and amplifies your message perfectly through all five stanza to the end. And your lead phrases at the beginning of each stanza are perfectly employed. Brilliant Write Sir!! A "7" and A FAV it is. Cheers and Best, Gary
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 2:37:00 PM
good luck with the editing gary i learned the tercet from you dear pal this is filled with deep raw emotions thank you for the heartfelt beautiful comment the leprechaun took a turn for the worst in this one lol as the treasure fell smiling happy paddies day to you and your beautiful wife wash it vdown with the firey irish spirits
Date: 2/22/2015 11:37:00 PM
Hello liam, sorry haven't been by sooner, just catching up on my reading, and this sir is a an amazing poem!
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 2:18:00 PM
not been around myself much arthur hope alls well with you pal thank you kindly for the wonderful comment happy paddies day dear friend
Date: 2/22/2015 6:10:00 PM
Be strong and courageous dear friend . . . a powerful write. Much love and light.
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 12:45:00 PM
david thank you dear pal i found my strength in the light of truth in the end wishing you a happy paddies day passing you a warm smile
Date: 2/22/2015 5:50:00 PM
Yeah I liked this Liam, cheers for that.
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 12:40:00 PM
thank you ever so kindly karl for the lovely comment deeply appreciated
Date: 2/22/2015 2:35:00 PM
Oh Liam....what a touching write. How sad...how utterly sad.. Is it wrong? No...No one can tell you to stop loving, but....you need to find someone who loves you with the same passion and strength. Letting go of a dream is never easy...I know. Sending you hugs....I wish you the best. YOU DESERVE NOTHING LESS THAN THE BEST...
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 12:23:00 PM
my heart eileen was breaking the day i wrote this well i was told if i were the last one on this earth so in those words spoke volumes but my little niece asking after a lady inspired this poem in deep heartfelt hurt thank you for the wonderful comment dear pal deeply appreciated wishing you a blessed st patricks day
Date: 2/22/2015 12:05:00 PM
such a heartbreaking write Liam - the imagery is exceptional:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 11:46:00 AM
ah jan dear pal thank you always for your heartwarming beautiful comments dear friend
Date: 2/22/2015 10:19:00 AM
An excellent poignant write my very dear friend, Liam. Thank you so much for sharing with me one of your precious gems tonight. God bless you. love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 11:38:00 AM
bless you always leonora for the heartfelt really beautiful comment sending you a warm smile wishing you a blessed st patricks day
Date: 2/22/2015 6:31:00 AM
As true poetry as ever existed my friend. Your pen conveys the depth of pain and misery that heartache brings. A7 and hope healing speeds into your life.
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 11:35:00 AM
your words are so very true robert dear friend someone enters my family claiming love only bringing heartache and shame to my heart then removes my name from poetry co written copyright theft i smile when i see the face of truth behind the mask wishing you a very happy paddies day dear pal
Date: 2/22/2015 4:24:00 AM
- Heartbreaking poem dear Liam !!!! - hug + hug+ hug // Anne-Lise :)
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 3/16/2015 11:20:00 AM
ah thank you anne lise dear pal tears fell when i was writing this as my little niece asked me where was her friend who she held her hand at my sisters and sat on her lap heartfelt comment deeply appreciated bless you always pal in his light
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