A Hair Out of Place

She was very old, very weak
Couldn't move, couldn't speak
Nurses were in need
Too many people to feed
I thought I'd volunteer
I needed to find a career
I noticed right away, 
As I brought the spoon to her face
Her painful, bloodshot eye
And the hair that was out of place
The course grey hair had pierced her eye for so long
No one could see there was something wrong
Her body gave up and her eye no longer watered
No one had time or could be bothered
But I saw it and brushed it out of her eye
I'll never forget the gratitude in her smile
I knew then if I could make a difference
No matter how big or how significant
It was the need I had to fulfill
Anything to lesson the pain of the ill
Just that tiny action
I took away what hurt
I knew what I needed
I became a nurse
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 9/4/2016 3:41:00 PM
Kindness is so powerful and your poem is truely magical. Congrats you deserve it!
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Date: 9/2/2016 8:13:00 PM
Tanis, congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 9/1/2016 8:04:00 AM
Very nice! I am one who is so sensitive to hair in the face. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/1/2016 7:27:00 AM
Congrats Tanis, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Date: 8/30/2016 9:22:00 AM
This is wonderful and so truly said in your poem. Congrats on your win! :) Sunita
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Date: 8/30/2016 3:22:00 AM
This is a great take on the topic. Congratulations. You got it in one. Many happy nursing days despite of the very hard working conditions. Kai
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Date: 8/29/2016 4:08:00 PM
Congratulations Tanis...
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Date: 8/29/2016 1:45:00 PM
Oh my.....this tears at the heart, and is a lesson to all that the smallest act of mercy and kindness, can make a gigantic difference. Well done, dear Tanis.
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Date: 8/29/2016 1:35:00 PM
Very beautiful Tanis!The small little unnoticed hair was causing such distress to the lady!Wish all nurses are so attentive to detail.Congrats on your win!
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Date: 8/29/2016 12:50:00 PM
Congratulations on your 2nd Place win, Tanis. You may want to revise your poem. It has some spelling mistakes. You won because your story is very moving and believable and fits the contest theme perfectly. Thank you.
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