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A Gang of Sparrows

From my bus window- in unison, all at once a g a n g of tiny brown sparrows hovered, and then perched on BARE branches of a small tree- they hung on like t r e m b l i n g brown leaves, in the WIND - exactly the same then, the throng left- winging in unison . . . _____________________ April 7, 2017 Verse/A Gang Of Sparrows Copyright Protected, ID 890586 Open Poetry Contest 2 Charlotte Jade Puddifoot Sixth Place

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/29/2017 2:37:00 PM

Broken Wing This is a beautiful poem. A 7

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 4/22/2017 12:31:00 PM

Back to congratulate you ;) hugs! mo

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/17/2017 2:43:00 PM

a very effective, descriptive little piece - love the sparrows as 'trembling brown leaves', that's exactly what they look like, and i could see them as surely as you saw them while travelling on the bus...the poem doesn't over-think itself, or try to be clever or obscure, it just allows the snapshot moment to happen on the page...you gave me different, and it paid off - congrats on your win in my contest!

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/17/2017 1:10:00 PM

This small poem is a piece of art, Constance. And with such a quietness, I have witnessed the brown sparrows with my own mind's eye. Lovely !! Congrats to you!

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/13/2017 5:02:00 PM

NATURE, ITS BEAUTY CLEARLY REFLECTED IN BIRDS, SINGING AND FLIGHT. I love sparrows because they are so refined in how they interact and move in this huge scary world. Your verses golden my friend. So much said in such few verses! A7 and a fav...

Doug Vinson

Date: 4/11/2017 11:28:00 PM

Back to read this one again - one of my favorites. : )

Lynn Marie

Date: 4/10/2017 10:47:00 PM

Your words bring these cute 'sparrows' to life:) The imagery is so sweet, I wonder 'how' they don't blow away and stay together. A charming write:) fave, 7+ lynnxxx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 4/10/2017 1:34:00 PM

It's amazing how they all flock together, BW, nicely portrayed. Sadly we don't have as many sparrows as we used to. // Barry

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/8/2017 7:57:00 AM

I'm imagining the little guys wearing tiny leather jackets!

Constance La France
Date: 4/8/2017 8:59:00 AM

Richard, thanks for the cute comment and for visiting.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/8/2017 5:10:00 AM

A most enjoyable moment....when words come easily to share magic witnessed....very nice, Constance

Constance La France
Date: 4/8/2017 9:00:00 AM

Hi James, yes we must take time to look around us at the beauty, thanks for reading my poem.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/7/2017 8:40:00 PM

Constance, I LOVE that final line. So pretty and also loved the imagery of the birds hanging like brown leaves. Sure hope you score with this one. Wish I could come up with free verse like she likes.

Constance La France
Date: 4/8/2017 9:04:00 AM

Andrea thanks for the compliment on my poem, will it was in a flash as the bus passed but it inspired me.. even if I do not place it does not diminish the beauty of my poem and I love it, while most are looking down at their cell phones, I look out the window.