A Friendly Smile

A friendly smile.
The maiden sobbed and walked along. 
A friendly smile;
The toothy grinning crocodile
said, ‘Sit by me, tell me what’s wrong.’
He ate her whole, spit out her thong.
A friendly smile…

For Debs’ Rondolet ‘Nature’ contest
(non PM at the moment, I think)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Haick Avatar
March 6, 2013 at 5:18 PM
: ) Love your unique humor! LOL Always, Annalise
K. Avatar
January 5, 2013 at 10:05 AM
Oh yikes! That is one good twist, Jack! And I have to admit, I had to smile with that twist-- I see this won something, so congrats to you! Soupmail in a bit.
Patrikar Avatar
December 31, 2012 at 6:19 AM
whoa.... that was something!!! i see this is an amazing win!! so very well done! on soup after a long long time, happy new year!
A   Avatar
December 19, 2012 at 10:13 PM
Jack, congratulations with your awesome win in Debbie's "Rondelets OR Simply 7 lines" contest... always~ pd
Johnson Avatar
December 18, 2012 at 3:52 PM
Well if this smile on my face is any indication, you certainly deserved your win jack. Love it when a good rhyme comes along, don't you? :)
Kendrick Avatar
December 15, 2012 at 10:08 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go ..Sara
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 15, 2012 at 5:26 AM
Congratulations on your win Jack xx
Guzzi Avatar
December 14, 2012 at 4:07 PM
Hey you ole funny bone tickler..I'm always here with an ear if you need to talk...YOU keep writing! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
Collins Avatar
December 13, 2012 at 9:36 AM
This is great.
Dietrich Avatar
December 12, 2012 at 6:38 PM
back here again, sure hoping this scores high.
Maverick Avatar
December 11, 2012 at 12:19 AM
Silly old crockodile.." still thats cold Blooded reasoning I suppose.? L O L)) I wonder if an alligator would have a Different approach..? enjoyed the read Jack; stay happy.."
Dietrich Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 8:04 PM
hahahaha, this is so awesome how you inserted humor!! I too used the word smile for one of my end rhymes but except for that, mine is totally different. I LOVE this, Jack. I hope she loves it too.
Kendrick Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 12:57 PM
You can look your Member area and find out when your membership ends..They extended it several times bescause of problems..Great work..Got a chuckle...Well some say grits are Girls Raised In The South..However, we eat corn that has been done some way to remove the husk and then dried and ground..We then buy it at the grocer...If you are lucky cook them right, they make a great mild or blan flavored side dish to compliment a spicy or strong flavored food or just as a breakfast side..Sara
Sivey Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 12:46 PM
This is a wondrously hilarious write my friend! I just love this creative and awesome poem here Jack! I really enjoyed reading this incredible piece, Great Work! I hope you can renew your PM my friend! If you need any help with it let me know my friend!
Guzzi Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 11:01 AM
LOL so my dear friend who was kind..let's list this under nature! Light & Love
Neels Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 9:24 AM
lol you got me grinning now Jack. Hope you are doing okay my friend! ;)
Sweetheart Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 8:48 AM
oh Jack u manage a smile from me always with your clever writes luv .. and that punchline of the croc eating her whole ..priceless ..
La France Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 8:32 AM
Jack, this is so wonderful, love it, best of luck in the contest. I am going to try writing one today. Constance
Andresen Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 7:14 AM
A nice poem, thank you Jack. - Good luck in the contest. - Have a lovely Sunday. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 7:13 AM
Love this Jack, am gonna watch out for them smiles from now on xx
Williams Avatar
December 9, 2012 at 6:35 AM
Jack, ha I love this, very clever my friend...David
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