Abdul Malik Mandani Poet Free verse

A Feather In My Cap

I looked at her
across the dance floor
And wanted her desperately.
It was written all over my face,
It made my heart skip a beat
whenever she waltzed near me 
and I suffered in silent misery.

But she was out of my league,
Too classy, too darn beautiful.
I turned around to walk away
when she tapped on
my shoulder lightly and asked,
"Can I have this dance with you?"
You could have knocked
me down with a feather!

08/03/2014

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Faye Gibson August 19, 2014 at 8:04 PM Enjoyable read, Abdul. Congratulations on your win.

Dr.Ram Mehta August 18, 2014 at 5:25 AM Very amazing take on the theme, Abdul. congrats Abdul Malik Mandani August 26, 2014 at 7:55 AM Glad you liked it. Thanks.

Nette Onclaud August 18, 2014 at 1:24 AM enticed, Abdul. another applause to you! Abdul Malik Mandani August 26, 2014 at 7:52 AM Thanks. You are too kind!

Poet Destroyer A August 17, 2014 at 10:18 PM Abdul, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda

Jan Allison August 17, 2014 at 5:35 PM wonderful story hope it had a happy ending:-) a well deserved winner Hugs jan xxx Abdul Malik Mandani August 26, 2014 at 7:54 AM It had a happy ending, indeed! But unfortunately...I CAN'T DANCE!

Andrea Dietrich August 17, 2014 at 5:11 PM Abdul, the salivating part was kind of a turn off, but WOW, did you ever knock this out of the park for cleverness and for the use of punctuation and all those other little things I look for when judging. I just loved how you got the two different expressions for feathers into your poem. Once in the title and again at the end of your poem. Congrats on your win. Abdul Malik Mandani August 26, 2014 at 7:42 AM You are right! I was mulling over it like forever and getting nowhere. So I let it stay. But, I have changed it! What do you think now?

Debbie Guzzi August 17, 2014 at 2:15 PM Women like men who are endearing [I guess you figured that out! ;)] Congrad's on Your win!! Light & Love Abdul Malik Mandani August 26, 2014 at 7:51 AM So true Debbie. Women ARE endearing, and you are one of them! Thanks for your kind words.

Barbara Gorelick August 3, 2014 at 10:20 PM Good idea for the contest..I sure enjoyed your poem. BG Abdul Malik Mandani August 5, 2014 at 10:08 AM Thanks Barbara.

Toquyen Harrell August 3, 2014 at 7:02 PM Haha, I love this. Bet you were shocked. Love this, Abdul! Abdul Malik Mandani August 5, 2014 at 10:08 AM Shocked I was, indeed. Floored! to be more precise. Glad you liked it. Thanks.