A Father's Failure

The great wish is that we shall never feel,
Dark as the shady thorns over the yonder;
Beating hearts of gloom just atop the hill
Men with rage they neglect the ponder.

Oh, it were I was happy fool as any
Content to play the game of dull pretense,
Specious are these moments for so many;
Truth tales of lies to their own bitter ends.

Some would weasel that amends could be made
Bed is done lied in, for shame has come in;
Son against father with sharp verbal blade
Killed a command,  instead honored sin.

Yet in the dark, light still filtered good through,
Heaven and hell, God above only who knew.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 3/11/2012 6:17:00 PM
I find this rich with mystery....well done !!
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Date: 2/22/2012 10:02:00 PM
hi tim.. been a while... this is a riveting write that makes one reflect on your forceful, dramatic images and theme on father-son struggles... well done!.:) huggs!
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Date: 2/20/2012 5:29:00 AM
Powerful poem here, Tim. love the sonnet form, and these words of yours fit perfectly. awesome. harry
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Date: 2/17/2012 3:56:00 PM
Words certainly can be thorns Tim and the hurt they cause are not forgotten. It seems to be the way of humanity to hurt each other.
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Date: 2/17/2012 11:32:00 AM
this is such a deep, beautiful write about the struggles and perhaps awakenings between father and son, tim... well- scribed; bow!..;0 huggs!
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Date: 2/17/2012 5:19:00 AM
This one has truth in it..The line "son against father with sharp verbal blade" is spoken of in the Bible..It is one symptom of time's end..This is so true now a days..Our new pastor even speaks negative of his father and his wife of her father..Sad..Sara
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Date: 2/17/2012 5:21:00 AM
Your kind review of my work was uplifting..It seems that there are no good men who can or want to run for president..It ages a couple double when they are in there though and the dangers that come with the job..Does the benefits outweigh the bad that come with the territory?..Sara
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