Debbie Guzzi Poet Diminished Hexaverse

A Do Dah Day Arrives

A contextual gray
dulls the horizon’s lure,
blending the sharper hues,
softening the day’s rush
like warm cotton batting
awaiting a fine rump.

Drizzle manifests,
depressing, maudlin
lackluster, shrouding
the zip in the day,
Uncle Remus frowns.

Ole Br’er Rabbit
would not come out!
The blue birds hide
waiting for sun.

Ole Sol peeks.
Remus smiles.
Br’er hops in.

Blue birds
arrive

SING!

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Connie Marcum Wong June 26, 2012 at 2:14 AM Congratulations on your win with this beauty Debbie.

Nette Onclaud June 24, 2012 at 9:38 PM you took this by the storm, debbie.. congrats with huggs!:)

Carol Sunshine Brown June 23, 2012 at 8:19 AM Congratulations on your placement in David's "Hexaverse" contest Debbie. Love, Carol

Gwendolen Song June 22, 2012 at 6:45 PM Deb, do tell me which childhood tale inspired this write..I fear I was locked in a virtual closet when I should have had someone reading me the classics...fancy storyline and full of energy! CON-grat-U-la-tions!!!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl June 22, 2012 at 6:30 PM Congratulations on your winning spot Debbie enjoyed reading this xx

Sara Kendrick June 22, 2012 at 3:45 PM Congrats on your win...Sara

Poet Destroyer A June 22, 2012 at 11:31 AM Deddie~xox~ A wonderful congratulations, in David's True version of Diminishing Hexaverse. Have yourself a good day,

David Williams June 22, 2012 at 10:58 AM Debbie, a do dah, big well done, I like Brer Rabbit..thanks for entering..David

Kim Merryman June 22, 2012 at 10:03 AM So cute! Congrats on your win, Debbie! Love, Kim

Andrea Dietrich June 22, 2012 at 7:53 AM Yours was just wonderful. Congrats,Debs.

Deborah Burch June 22, 2012 at 2:00 AM brava!!!!congratulations!!! 'highness!" :-) love this!!! miss you...i still cant blog...so this and soupmail or email is it....or carrier pigion ;-) btw...you can fill my sm up with all the instructions you care to share ;-) (i can still read blogs....) im in a creative slump it seems...all my stuff gets n/a....lol or im on another frequency...lol...love you bunches, deb

Kash Poet June 18, 2012 at 7:04 AM Hmmm...perfect!!

Nette Onclaud June 13, 2012 at 12:36 PM joy, joy emanating from this mood, debbie... this piece sings!!.:)winning huggs

Richard Palmer June 13, 2012 at 7:52 AM so cute,well done Debbie,truly enjoyed,posted a poem Laugh out Loud,testing my mind,would like your comment...

Sara Kendrick June 13, 2012 at 5:42 AM Great descriptive work..Yes, Br'er Rabbit would stay in the den on some gray days to keep from getting wet..Enjoyed reading and this adds fodder to my genre to write something a little different..Thanks for the congrats..Sara

Andrea Dietrich June 12, 2012 at 9:51 PM wow, it's a SMILEY poem, Debs. and I LOVE it. One of my favorites so far in this contest.You really crafted it.

Cyndi Macmillan June 12, 2012 at 9:17 PM Oh, I had a book as a little girl about brier rabbit... was it Disney? I am so tired, I'm loopy. Wrote that po! The clutter bug speaks! As for this, hope it does well in the contest. Such a cool blend! Hugs, Cyndi :-)

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet June 12, 2012 at 8:54 PM Well written and very creative!!! Reads like a winner to me!!!