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A Delicate Flower Promise

A bouquet of jasmines and gardenias hangs Their fragrance losing ambrosial whiffs; A death of his loyalty truly wrought Where crackle of night marks a bridal vow’s end-- How I , in sunken despair stand alone On the aisle of innumerable regret ; For my maiden name is unchanged When a man betrothed chooses a turnabout… And delicate flowers’ promise grasps the tears Until their luster pales into ashen hues Upon my hands , a collapse of nuptial splendor: How naïve of me to ignore his gazes, uncertain When those eyes bland as torn petals falter~ While gaunt cluster I hold tonight... drops on the chapel floor. For Laura Loo: Verses Of Metaphor ll ------------------- 10/4/2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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October 8, 2018 at 8:55 AM
Nette, you masterfully pen beauty in the brokenness. I love this inside-outside feel that takes you from what’s sadly evident and obvious to the deeper dark despair of internal combustion. The contrast of sweet fragrance and the death of love (and even hope).. Brilliance!!
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October 7, 2018 at 8:59 PM
Well penned, nette. Beautifully dramatic. Congrats on your well deserved top win.
Gondolf Avatar
October 7, 2018 at 1:22 PM
What a beautiful sad verse, Nette, I can feel the deep emotional pain. Congrats on your win. John
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October 4, 2018 at 8:06 PM
A very succint coverage of a longish period of time. A way to describe destruction and make it feel really bad. I was recently at a cemetery, and while I didn’t stay, there were a lot of browned and dried flower petals.
Warrior Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 4:58 AM
Lovely write my friend...Ready for a Top Win!...love & light...^WW^
Cunningham Avatar
October 4, 2018 at 2:39 AM
No shortage of metaphors' in your sad verse Nette. Beautifully written. Tom
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October 3, 2018 at 3:25 PM
Sad tale, but masterfully crafted. You have a truly lovely way of turning a phrase! ;) Good luck in the contest!
Sands Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 2:59 PM
Oh so sad and beautifully written Nette. Well done :)
Pandit Avatar
October 3, 2018 at 2:25 PM
Lovely metaphors ..excellent depiction in brilliant style..well done, friend. A winner for me.
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October 3, 2018 at 2:17 PM
Beautifully done Nette. I like how you started this up and let us down slowly and gently. I could feel that sadness building as it came to the end.
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