Carrie Richards Poet Haiku

A Day of Dark Rain

a foreboding sound

          echoes in a thunderstorm....

                   mourners at a grave
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                   a torrent of rain

           muffles the sound of crying....

watching crows scatter

                              --
one wet crow hunches

          on branch of the brittle oak....

                  dark clouds hover low







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For Skat's "Dark Rain" haiku contest

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Sara Kendrick February 6, 2011 at 4:04 PM Congratulations on your win.Feel for that wet crow....Sara

Kory Calhoun January 24, 2011 at 6:22 AM Hi Carrie - This has been my favorite haiku I've read. Congratulations on your WIN in the "Dark Rain" contest. Best wishes, KC

The Situation January 18, 2011 at 7:44 PM congradulations on your win. T. S.

Elaine George January 18, 2011 at 6:27 PM Congratulations! Dear Carrie. I knew this would be a winner. Lainie

Tahera Mannan January 17, 2011 at 7:54 PM Many warm congratulations for this super win.

Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2011 at 7:32 PM Yours are VERY haiku, CArrie. Congratulations and a big 7! Luv, andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta January 17, 2011 at 2:26 PM Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, carrie

James Fraser January 17, 2011 at 1:18 PM I love the dark sombre angle in this wonderful piece Carrie. It surely deserves it's placing in my eyes....:)

Audrey Haick January 17, 2011 at 11:17 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, Carrie. Love, Annalise

Elaine George January 17, 2011 at 9:09 AM Such images you paint with these exceptional Haiku's dear Carrie. Lainie

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 17, 2011 at 6:00 AM Congrats Carrie on your wonderful win in the Dark Rain contest... enjoy another sweet success and victory with luv..

Carol Sunshine Brown January 17, 2011 at 5:46 AM Congratulations for your win in the "Dark Rain" contest Carrie, sponsored by S K A T*. Love, Carol

Wilma Neels January 17, 2011 at 4:49 AM Wow Carrie, what beautiful imagery in each haiku.. Congratulations to you, love Wilma

Michael J. Falotico January 17, 2011 at 4:06 AM A great write Carrie, beauty in your array of Haiku's.... always Michael

Skat A January 16, 2011 at 9:34 PM Congratulations, Carrie !thank you so much for your Haiku. I had fun reading every dark rain entry~luv~SKAT

Andrea Dietrich January 15, 2011 at 2:07 PM I love how this all melds together so nicely for an excellent series of graveside haiku, Carrie. You will certainly score high, or you should in my book.LUv,Andrea

Carolyn Devonshire January 15, 2011 at 10:29 AM Your images of this graveside service are awesome, Carrie! Outstanding haiku series. Why does it always seem to rain when people we love are buried? I can't remember one family funeral ever occurring on a sunny day. You made a great connection for me with this poem and it goes to my favorites. Do you remember the song "Here Comes the Rain Again"? Your poem reminds me of it. Terrific entry for the contest! Love, Carolyn

James Peranteau January 15, 2011 at 5:40 AM Very nice write dear poet ! much love, james

Nette Onclaud January 15, 2011 at 1:51 AM if you made my hairs stand, it only means that this disturbing but fabulous piece affected me, carrie! keeps the psyche going! best winning wishes in the contest! :) hugggs, nette

Kabuteng P.Ink K. January 15, 2011 at 12:05 AM this sure had such an impact this had on me-- I find it so stirring whenever it rains during burials.. very stirring piece, Carrie -- another winner I think-- thank you for dropping by my poems :) -- nikko :)

Hathor Ammutlinra January 14, 2011 at 9:53 PM A very sad entry Carrie Richards, good luck in the contest' lin~ra

James Marshall Goff January 14, 2011 at 9:15 PM perfect Carrie!!! jimbo

Tahera Mannan January 14, 2011 at 9:09 PM Just beautiful Carrie

Andrea Dietrich January 14, 2011 at 8:35 PM this is the one I've seen most haiku-ish. Wish I could do mine that way, but oh well, I still like what I came up with. haha. Luv, Andrea

Audrey Haick January 14, 2011 at 7:37 PM Fantastic imagery in your Haiku, Carrie! No surprise as you always, rock! This is not necessary...but anyway, best wiishes for a great win! Love, Annalise

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