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A Day In May

The eighth of May, is mother’s day, My son keeps chickens, eggs to lay, Kids came for lunch, love them so, Told us about their chicken Flo, Laying not easy, Flo clucked loud, Hungry after her feat, was proud, Greedy for seed put neck through pen, Just too far, now a beheaded hen. Competition Entry: A LAY FOR A DAY IN MAY SPONSOR: ANDREA DIETRICH DATED: 08/05/2022

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Bill Baker

Date: 6/18/2022 7:17:00 AM

Oops! the cost of greed. I liked it Jennifer. Bill

Ann Foster

Date: 5/24/2022 8:43:00 AM

Oh my... great write... Ann

Eve Roper

Date: 5/19/2022 1:52:00 PM

Jen, beautiful verse. Congratulations on your win in Andera's contest. . Blessings to you.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/18/2022 10:57:00 AM

"Laying it all out" Jenn. Sometimes we "lose our heads" when we stick them out too far." Not egg-actly what Flo, or we, hade planned! I guess chicken is on the menu for dinner! Congratulations on this fun and very clever "lay."

John Watt

Date: 5/17/2022 4:01:00 PM

A "Lay" poem about a hen and her eggs? You are just too clever for me, Jenn! I love your Mother's Day theme for the Day in May contest. Guess we're going to have to change to website name to Poultry Soup now, lol. I suppose all your chickens eventually learn to go with the Flo. She just sort of lost her head. Congrats for your win, my friend. Hugs and blessings ~ John

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/17/2022 1:36:00 AM

Different and refreshing, although a tad gruesome for the poor old Flo.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/16/2022 3:16:00 PM

Enjoyed the tale of Flo the hen but alas not the ending for poor Flo. Congrats on your win. Nice write. love phyl

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/16/2022 8:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A cute/creative write. Have a blessed day/week writing away....................

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2022 1:41:00 PM

I enjoyed the cute little story of the chicken named Flo inside this May day poem, Jennifer. The last line. OH my! haha. Congrats and thanks for entering my contest.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/13/2022 5:12:00 AM

Fun day in May--well depicted, Jennifer.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/12/2022 11:48:00 AM

Sounds like you'll enjoy a coq au vin. Chilled white wine is best. Hugs.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/12/2022 11:36:00 AM

Jenny, you have written a very nice poem. You are able to catch the interest of the reader from the very first to the very last line. This is not only due to your excellent sense of humor but also to the wonderful diction that you employ and the vivid beams of hope that you describe. , may you be blessed forever dear friend. I really appreciate your great uplifting comments on my page.

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/12/2022 9:28:00 AM

Hi Jenny, You penned a good poem, so apt for May and Mother's Day. I could relate to this piece, growing up we had a chicken coop.Best wishes in the contest. I hope you an amazing Mother’s Day. Have a nice day my friend:-) Alexis

Anil Deo

Date: 5/11/2022 10:14:00 PM

Poor flow. Nice family meals & takes, but FLO HAD LITTLE EGG FLOW, HAD TO GO? ThanX for visiting me Sis. Shalom shalom & Eireene

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 5/11/2022 2:41:00 PM

Nice penning Jenny, good humorous piece and hope all is well, blessings always,Gordon

Sally Eslinger

Date: 5/10/2022 4:05:00 PM

Jennifer, hi! This poem, a true narrative or so it read & felt, is terribly moving to me. The simple, the common in life never seems to stay simple. Little hens will be the ones to see the sky falling…Or will make the heart fall upon giving a gift of sustenance! Here, too, your “simple” poem presents a vast metaphor for Sacrifice, so appropriate for Mother’s Day—a day of heartbreak for me…we adopted 2 toddler brothers, who now, 30 yrs later, want nothing to do with us…beheadd… Sacrifice requires giving Love. Ask Christ. Ask your hen…Amazing Poetry,Jennifer! Thank you.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 5/8/2022 5:55:00 PM

A delightful Lay for a day in May Jennifer. Great rhyme and rhythm, pity the hens head went missing… Belle

Jan Allison

Date: 5/8/2022 2:58:00 PM

Happy Mothers day ... and it was all going so well until the beheading! hugs Jan xx