Alexis Y. Poet Pantoum

A Dark and Stormy Night

That dark and stormy night lives in my mind.
We thought we would get home before the storm.
Bang crash,how could nature be so unkind? 
My sweetie died quick  and so did my "norm".

We thought we would get home before the storm.
Although I wasn't driving I took the blame.
My sweetie died quick and so did my "norm".
I'm about to go nuts, I yell out his name.

Although I wasn't driving I took the blame
I would do anything to change that day
I'm about to go nuts, I yell out his name.
All I know is, that day "fate" had it's say.

I would do anything to change that day.
Bang crash, how could nature be so unkind?
All I know is, that day "fate had it's say.
That dark and stormy night lives in my mind.


Contest: Pantoum 
Sponsor: Eve Roper 


09-28-16

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Chris Green June 1, 2017 at 8:06 AM This was fantastic Alexis. Now that I am familiar with the form, you did a wonderful job with this. It expresses your theme of loss and sadness perfectly and all fits together so nicely. Really well written.

Freddie Robinson Jr. November 26, 2016 at 7:24 AM A beautifully tragic poem, Alexis. You really are quite a talented poetess. This pantoum form, you seem to have mastered it quite well. The emotionally driven (no pun intended) force of this poem to its ultimate untimely conclusion is so vividly expressed that it breaks the reader's heart. There's power in that pen. Watch yourself. Love the poem on every level. Many blessings to you.

Eve Roper October 17, 2016 at 8:11 PM Alexis, congratulations on your win :-) Hugs Eve Alexis Y. October 17, 2016 at 8:25 PM Hi Eve, Thanks for my placement in your awesome contest:-) Alexis

Larry Bradfield October 17, 2016 at 1:14 PM Congratulations on your win, Alexis. What a heat wrenching poem! !!.Larry

Joseph May October 17, 2016 at 1:09 PM Congrats on your win Alexis....hugs

Anisha Dutta October 17, 2016 at 12:19 PM Congrats Alexis to win. Eve is so considerate to place all of us in same rank. Really I appreciate.

Alexis Y. October 17, 2016 at 11:17 AM Hi Eve, Thanks for my placement in your awesome contest:-) Alexis

Darren White October 17, 2016 at 12:53 AM Alexis, I'd like to congratulate you, but I am not sure if that is the right thing to do here.... It's a beautiful tragic pantoum. Alexis Y. October 17, 2016 at 11:15 AM Hi Darren, I appreciate you coming by to comment/congratulate. Congratulations to you too:-) Alexis

Bukiwe Tiyane October 3, 2016 at 4:54 PM A very sad write Alexis...

Seren Roberts October 2, 2016 at 11:09 PM Fantastic read...Serenxx. 7 given

Jan Allison October 1, 2016 at 6:23 PM beautiful but so sad Alexis I really love the pantoum form it is challenging but when it results in a stunning poem like this one all the hard work is worth it:-) hugs jan xx7

Arthur Vaso September 30, 2016 at 10:48 PM Well done, is often when a tragedy strikes the survivor takes the blame or guilt for surviving! :)

Paul Callus September 30, 2016 at 1:22 PM Very well written, Alexis; a sad memory of a stormy night that will never be erased. gl in the contest. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich September 29, 2016 at 8:51 PM a sad story in your pantoum, Alexis. I sure do enjoy reading what poets do with this form!! good luck in the contest.

Joseph May September 29, 2016 at 8:50 PM A very sad write Alexis...best wishes

Vladislav Raven September 29, 2016 at 7:18 PM Hi Alexis, a write written straight from the heart. Their is such a beauty within the tragedy of this write. So many times the one left behind does blame themselves for whatever happens in a tragedy. I did so many years ago. This is one write i am glad i did not miss. The content is emotion driven. Good luck in the contest with this excellent write Alexis. Hugs....Mike. XX This has to be a seven and a fave

Demetrios Trifiatis September 29, 2016 at 12:33 PM Emotional, tragically but beautiful ! A very well written poem. Good luck dear, Alexis!

Nette Onclaud September 29, 2016 at 6:45 AM ohh, how gripping is this story, alexis... hope this is fiction though; wonderfully scribed!..huggs

Keith Logan September 29, 2016 at 6:14 AM I almost gave this a seven, which for me, is rare indeed. I can live without the challenge of trying to write in a particular form but also appreciate when I see a good example of same.