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A Dark and Stormy Night

That dark and stormy night lives in my mind.
We thought we would get home before the storm.
Bang crash,how could nature be so unkind? 
My sweetie died quick  and so did my "norm".

We thought we would get home before the storm.
Although I wasn't driving I took the blame.
My sweetie died quick and so did my "norm".
I'm about to go nuts, I yell out his name.

Although I wasn't driving I took the blame
I would do anything to change that day
I'm about to go nuts, I yell out his name.
All I know is, that day "fate" had it's say.

I would do anything to change that day.
Bang crash, how could nature be so unkind?
All I know is, that day "fate had it's say.
That dark and stormy night lives in my mind.


Contest: Pantoum 
Sponsor: Eve Roper 


09-28-16

Copyright © Alexis Y. | Year Posted 2016

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Chris Green Date: 6/1/2017 8:06:00 AM This was fantastic Alexis. Now that I am familiar with the form, you did a wonderful job with this. It expresses your theme of loss and sadness perfectly and all fits together so nicely. Really well written. Login to Reply

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 11/26/2016 7:24:00 AM A beautifully tragic poem, Alexis. You really are quite a talented poetess. This pantoum form, you seem to have mastered it quite well. The emotionally driven (no pun intended) force of this poem to its ultimate untimely conclusion is so vividly expressed that it breaks the reader's heart. There's power in that pen. Watch yourself. Love the poem on every level. Many blessings to you. Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 10/17/2016 8:11:00 PM Alexis, congratulations on your win :-) Hugs Eve Login to Reply Alexis Y. Date: 10/17/2016 8:25:00 PM Hi Eve, Thanks for my placement in your awesome contest:-) Alexis

Larry Bradfield Date: 10/17/2016 1:14:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Alexis. What a heat wrenching poem! !!.Larry Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 10/17/2016 1:09:00 PM Congrats on your win Alexis....hugs Login to Reply

Anisha Dutta Date: 10/17/2016 12:19:00 PM Congrats Alexis to win. Eve is so considerate to place all of us in same rank. Really I appreciate. Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 10/17/2016 11:17:00 AM Hi Eve, Thanks for my placement in your awesome contest:-) Alexis Login to Reply

Darren White Date: 10/17/2016 12:53:00 AM Alexis, I'd like to congratulate you, but I am not sure if that is the right thing to do here.... It's a beautiful tragic pantoum. Login to Reply Alexis Y. Date: 10/17/2016 11:15:00 AM Hi Darren, I appreciate you coming by to comment/congratulate. Congratulations to you too:-) Alexis

Bukiwe Tiyane Date: 10/3/2016 4:54:00 PM A very sad write Alexis... Login to Reply

Seren Roberts Date: 10/2/2016 11:09:00 PM Fantastic read...Serenxx. 7 given Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 10/1/2016 6:23:00 PM beautiful but so sad Alexis I really love the pantoum form it is challenging but when it results in a stunning poem like this one all the hard work is worth it:-) hugs jan xx7 Login to Reply

Arthur Vaso Date: 9/30/2016 10:48:00 PM Well done, is often when a tragedy strikes the survivor takes the blame or guilt for surviving! :) Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 9/30/2016 1:22:00 PM Very well written, Alexis; a sad memory of a stormy night that will never be erased. gl in the contest. Regards // paul Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/29/2016 8:51:00 PM a sad story in your pantoum, Alexis. I sure do enjoy reading what poets do with this form!! good luck in the contest. Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 9/29/2016 8:50:00 PM A very sad write Alexis...best wishes Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 9/29/2016 7:18:00 PM Hi Alexis, a write written straight from the heart. Their is such a beauty within the tragedy of this write. So many times the one left behind does blame themselves for whatever happens in a tragedy. I did so many years ago. This is one write i am glad i did not miss. The content is emotion driven. Good luck in the contest with this excellent write Alexis. Hugs....Mike. XX This has to be a seven and a fave Login to Reply

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 9/29/2016 12:33:00 PM Emotional, tragically but beautiful ! A very well written poem. Good luck dear, Alexis! Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/29/2016 6:45:00 AM ohh, how gripping is this story, alexis... hope this is fiction though; wonderfully scribed!..huggs Login to Reply

Keith Logan Date: 9/29/2016 6:14:00 AM I almost gave this a seven, which for me, is rare indeed. I can live without the challenge of trying to write in a particular form but also appreciate when I see a good example of same. Login to Reply