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     Joseph's 'Choose A Line' Contest  ~  May 16, 2025

A Crimson Sky Breaks the Distant Shore

I squinted while gazing into the western skies
my attention drawn to banks where willows wept.
Twilight, a melange of magical moments in my eyes,
usually interludes when twilight colors were windswept
just before the juncture where daylight slowly faded 
and the reign between sun and moon were traded.

But tonight, "a crimson sky breaks the distant shore."
Appearing low across the horizon as if flames of fire 
or a canvas where vermillion paint fills every open pore.
Dusk glows with summer heat as shifts of light transpire.
Silently, the sun sinks, and the transfer of rule unfolds.
Trailing behind are gossamer rays of ambers and golds.
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Goldsmith Avatar
May 23, 2025 at 9:25 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I loved reading your beautiful write again. Have a blessed day with your win............
May Avatar
May 22, 2025 at 3:06 PM
Congrats on your win Lin, Very nicely done
Beaufort Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 10:31 AM
Lin, this is beautiful. The alliteration of "melange of magical moments" made me smile. I can see why you are an artist as well as a poet. You have a way of seeing and describing things that seem very pleasing. Take care, of course!!!
Lane Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 1:16 PM
I'm smiling to know you were pleased with the alliteration, but never an overload of it. Thanks so much, Duke.
Meadows Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 8:24 AM
So beautifully written!!
Lane Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 1:14 PM
Thank you so very much, Daisy.
Empress Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 5:32 AM
Ah this is my fave time of the day youv captured her dear linnersz, i absolutely love the colors and the picture too as well as the elegance of your word weaving! If one didnt know they could tell after reading your poems that you have an artistic mindset and your quill breathes beauty! Capturing so much of what we see all around! I really love the ending two lines as well as rhyme scheme! Sublime! Pleasure reading your poems today! Sending you light always
Lane Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 6:20 AM
I try to capture sundown as I see, particularly one in which we had to paint it so deeply awash in crimson, but sunrise is my time of peacefulness. Thanks ever so much for your wonderful words of encouragement, Ink.
Goldsmith Avatar
May 16, 2025 at 2:17 PM
What a beautiful write and pretty picture you have here. I love the sky by day or by night. "Good Luck" We both did this contest. Have a lovely day/weekend writing away..........
Lane Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 6:18 AM
Oh, I agree with you on the sky visions, Paula. Thanks very much for the many kind comments you leave for my poetry.
Andresen Avatar
May 16, 2025 at 10:31 AM
- Yes, it's a magical moment... moments like these should be cherished :) - Wishing you a lovely weekend, Lin :) - hugs
Lane Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 6:17 AM
Really is, Anne-Lise. Thank you for the weekend wishes, and yours as well. Hugs.
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