Brenda Meier-Hans Poet Concrete

A Concrete Snowman

THE BLACK
                                                    SATIN HAT
                                                    SAT TIGHT
                                        ON THE YOUNG MANS BALD
                                                    HEAD. HIS 
                                                EYES BLACK AS 
                                            NIGHT STARED INTO
                                              NOTHINGNESS. IN 
                                                 FRONT OF HIM
                                                      WERE 3
                                              PATHS WHERE THE
                                           CHILDREN HAD ROLLED 
                     THREE BALLS OF SNOW MUCH EALIER THAT VERY DAY. 
                                         PATCHES OF GREEN GRASS 
                                          STUCK THROUGH PACKED
                                                FREEZING SNOW.
                                        IN THE MIDDLE OF HIS FACE
                                A CROOKED CARROT POINTED TOWARD 
                            THE HOUSE WHERE CHILDREN SAT LOOKING
                             OUT THEIR WINDOW AT THEIR NEW FOUND
                              FRIEND. HIS BUTTON MOUTH SHAPED FOR
                                HIM TO LOOK HAPPY SEEMED TO SMILE 
                                  AT THEM AS THEY STARTED TO BLOW
                                       KISSES AT THEIR WONDERFUL 
                                                  NEW SNOWMAN.

Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 
10.27.2014

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Team Poetrysoup July 30, 2020 at 3:35 PM Good job

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Mick Talbot November 30, 2017 at 11:16 AM A concrete snowman, brill!

Jeremy Smith May 11, 2017 at 12:48 PM This is wonderful!! The snowman is my favorite winter character!

Andrea Dietrich December 11, 2014 at 11:21 PM I couldn't find a recent poem of yours to comment to but I clicked on your BEST poem list and this is top of the list. I guess people love this one of yours a lot, and I agree , it's very special.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders December 3, 2014 at 8:38 PM Hi Brenda, Dylan loved the showman shape and poem! He says it's great! We live in Florida so he doesn't get to make showmen...maybe someday we'll take a trip north..hugs, Rhonda &Dylan Brenda Meier-Hans December 4, 2014 at 9:52 AM Thanks Rhonda and Dylan. Just make sure you bundle up warm when you come this way.

David Mohn November 20, 2014 at 8:24 AM Very cute Brenda...wonderfully written Brenda Meier-Hans December 4, 2014 at 9:53 AM Thank you David.

Paul Callus November 5, 2014 at 1:38 PM Well done, Brenda!!! This form is new to me, but from what I can see you made a great job of it. Lovely snowman! Clever author:) // paul Brenda Meier-Hans November 5, 2014 at 2:18 PM Thanks Paul, for both complements.

Jerry T Curtis November 4, 2014 at 7:34 AM Awesome, How long did it take you to make this snowman ? Brenda Meier-Hans November 4, 2014 at 7:52 AM Thanks Jerry. :-). Not as long as a real one lol. I think. Brenda Meier-Hans November 4, 2014 at 7:52 AM Definitely warmer.

Andrea Dietrich November 3, 2014 at 3:42 PM excellent use of this form. WOW> what a good job you did of it. And the poem itself tells a sweet little story that is really nice. Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 4:32 PM Thanks Andrea. I enjoy building snowmen. This one I didn't freeze doing.

James Fraser October 30, 2014 at 3:47 PM Not easy these Concrete crafts Brenda, but you sure captured it here. Everyone loves a Snowman, nice one, James :) Brenda Meier-Hans October 30, 2014 at 10:28 PM Thank you James.

M. L. Kiser October 29, 2014 at 3:35 PM That was wonderful. Brenda Meier-Hans October 29, 2014 at 4:21 PM Thanks

Charmaine Chircop October 28, 2014 at 4:24 PM Adorably sweet this is lovely lady,I love snowmen..They bring such joy t my heart..Makes me become that child again : ) Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 4:37 PM Thanks Charmaine. That's why it was so much fun building this one.

Sandra Haight October 28, 2014 at 10:31 AM Wow, Brenda - such a clever poem presentation in words and concrete imagery of the dear snowman. You had to choose your words wisely to do this. Also brought back memories of kids, grandkids, and us doing this with them. Very nice! Sandra Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 1:37 PM Such wonderful memories Sandra. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Dorian Petersen Potter October 28, 2014 at 8:47 AM Beautiful snowman- poem Brenda! He can't wait to play with the kids!lol...love and God bless you! xxx D. Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 1:36 PM Do you want to build a snowman? XOXO

Jan Allison October 28, 2014 at 5:01 AM SIMPLY STUNNING !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hugs Jan xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen October 28, 2014 at 4:59 AM - I love your snowman! - Great poem, Brenda !! - // Anne-Lise :)

Maurice Yvonne October 28, 2014 at 2:39 AM It's a snowman. I am a sucker for your Concrete writes. I love this poem and the drawing is the icing. I can't resist I have to fav this frozen treat. Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 8:46 AM Ah, thanks Maurice. I'm glad you like it so much.

Dan Helppi October 27, 2014 at 10:54 PM I love your idea here, I imagine it scaled down so one can't read it unless they look real close. I was playing with my zoom and it does look cool. Great job Brenda. Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 8:43 AM Thank you Dan. I tried to zoom mine down but I am clueless as how to do that loo.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma October 27, 2014 at 10:40 PM Mesmerising words so structured into a snowman Brenda! wow real amazing dear! agree wid Paul, I give u a perfect ten ! Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 8:41 AM Thanks for your kind words Dr. Sharma.

Eve Roper October 27, 2014 at 10:31 PM A "7” for you girl if there was higher you would get it from me this is totally wonderful love and hugs :) eve Brenda Meier-Hans October 28, 2014 at 8:40 AM Ah, thanks so much Eve.