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A Concrete Snowman

THE BLACK
                                                    SATIN HAT
                                                    SAT TIGHT
                                        ON THE YOUNG MANS BALD
                                                    HEAD. HIS 
                                                EYES BLACK AS 
                                            NIGHT STARED INTO
                                              NOTHINGNESS. IN 
                                                 FRONT OF HIM
                                                      WERE 3
                                              PATHS WHERE THE
                                           CHILDREN HAD ROLLED 
                     THREE BALLS OF SNOW MUCH EALIER THAT VERY DAY. 
                                         PATCHES OF GREEN GRASS 
                                          STUCK THROUGH PACKED
                                                FREEZING SNOW.
                                        IN THE MIDDLE OF HIS FACE
                                A CROOKED CARROT POINTED TOWARD 
                            THE HOUSE WHERE CHILDREN SAT LOOKING
                             OUT THEIR WINDOW AT THEIR NEW FOUND
                              FRIEND. HIS BUTTON MOUTH SHAPED FOR
                                HIM TO LOOK HAPPY SEEMED TO SMILE 
                                  AT THEM AS THEY STARTED TO BLOW
                                       KISSES AT THEIR WONDERFUL 
                                                  NEW SNOWMAN.

Written by Brenda Meier-Hans 
10.27.2014

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Date: 7/30/2020 3:35:00 PM

Good job

Wither Ornot

Date: 6/27/2019 11:52:00 AM

Mick Talbot

Date: 11/30/2017 11:16:00 AM

A concrete snowman, brill!

Jeremy Smith

Date: 5/11/2017 12:48:00 PM

This is wonderful!! The snowman is my favorite winter character!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/11/2014 11:21:00 PM

I couldn't find a recent poem of yours to comment to but I clicked on your BEST poem list and this is top of the list. I guess people love this one of yours a lot, and I agree , it's very special.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 12/3/2014 8:38:00 PM

Hi Brenda, Dylan loved the showman shape and poem! He says it's great! We live in Florida so he doesn't get to make showmen...maybe someday we'll take a trip north..hugs, Rhonda &Dylan

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 12/4/2014 9:52:00 AM

Thanks Rhonda and Dylan. Just make sure you bundle up warm when you come this way.

David Mohn

Date: 11/20/2014 8:24:00 AM

Very cute Brenda...wonderfully written

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 12/4/2014 9:53:00 AM

Thank you David.

Paul Callus

Date: 11/5/2014 1:38:00 PM

Well done, Brenda!!! This form is new to me, but from what I can see you made a great job of it. Lovely snowman! Clever author:) // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 11/5/2014 2:18:00 PM

Thanks Paul, for both complements.

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 11/4/2014 7:34:00 AM

Awesome, How long did it take you to make this snowman ?

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 11/4/2014 7:52:00 AM

Thanks Jerry. :-). Not as long as a real one lol. I think.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 11/4/2014 7:52:00 AM

Definitely warmer.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/3/2014 3:42:00 PM

excellent use of this form. WOW> what a good job you did of it. And the poem itself tells a sweet little story that is really nice.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 11/3/2014 4:32:00 PM

Thanks Andrea. I enjoy building snowmen. This one I didn't freeze doing.

James Fraser

Date: 10/30/2014 3:47:00 PM

Not easy these Concrete crafts Brenda, but you sure captured it here. Everyone loves a Snowman, nice one, James :)

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/30/2014 10:28:00 PM

Thank you James.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 10/29/2014 3:35:00 PM

That was wonderful.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/29/2014 4:21:00 PM

Thanks

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/28/2014 4:24:00 PM

Adorably sweet this is lovely lady,I love snowmen..They bring such joy t my heart..Makes me become that child again : )

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/28/2014 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Charmaine. That's why it was so much fun building this one.

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/28/2014 10:31:00 AM

Wow, Brenda - such a clever poem presentation in words and concrete imagery of the dear snowman. You had to choose your words wisely to do this. Also brought back memories of kids, grandkids, and us doing this with them. Very nice! Sandra

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/28/2014 1:37:00 PM

Such wonderful memories Sandra. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 10/28/2014 8:47:00 AM

Beautiful snowman- poem Brenda! He can't wait to play with the kids!lol...love and God bless you! xxx D.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/28/2014 1:36:00 PM

Do you want to build a snowman? XOXO

Jan Allison

Date: 10/28/2014 5:01:00 AM

SIMPLY STUNNING !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Hugs Jan xxx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/28/2014 4:59:00 AM

- I love your snowman! - Great poem, Brenda !! - // Anne-Lise :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/28/2014 2:39:00 AM

It's a snowman. I am a sucker for your Concrete writes. I love this poem and the drawing is the icing. I can't resist I have to fav this frozen treat.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/28/2014 8:46:00 AM

Ah, thanks Maurice. I'm glad you like it so much.

Dan Helppi

Date: 10/27/2014 10:54:00 PM

I love your idea here, I imagine it scaled down so one can't read it unless they look real close. I was playing with my zoom and it does look cool. Great job Brenda.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 10/28/2014 8:43:00 AM

Thank you Dan. I tried to zoom mine down but I am clueless as how to do that loo.