A Caged Bird

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Jan.22.2024

Put Your Best Sijo Forward Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Andrea Dietrich

Confined within the rusty iron bars to hop and trip
Wishing to fly aloft into Heaven's seamless starry heights
A bird beats her wings in vain but trilling in sweet sad notes!

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Bill Baker

Date: 1/24/2024 9:53:00 PM

Lovely Sijo, my friend. great entry for Andrea's contest. Have a pleasant week! A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Stephan McBride

Date: 1/24/2024 6:27:00 AM

Beautiful poem that brings the true meaning of the hidden mysteries of life , : )

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/23/2024 5:16:00 AM

Oh my, this is a marvelous sijo dear poetess, I absolutely adore the theme that you've chosen and expressed the feelings of that bird who's caged behind bars and wishes to escape into the serenity of heaven... Singing in a wishful way that someday she will be able to touch the winds of eden.. Although, there's a sombre essence in her voice..This is one the most impeccable sijo poems I've read.. It's sad and heartfelt too, yet, hued with a slight ray of hope somewhere between the lines..Beautiful

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/22/2024 12:23:00 PM

This is a heartbreaking, poem, Valsa; no bird has any business being confined to a cage. Nevertheless, it was quite inspiring to see her persevere and keep singing and beating her wings. I hope you're doing well and all the awkwardness is behind you.

Silent One

Date: 1/22/2024 12:14:00 PM

This is a really sad one, no bird deserves to be in a cage.. I wrote one for this contest in a similar theme.. All the best..

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/22/2024 9:04:00 AM

- ... sad tones ... beautifully written, Valsa :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Ink Empress

Date: 1/22/2024 7:12:00 AM

I dunno why i felt sad reading this sijo dear valsa, i felt the depth of this one. And i think in so many ways many do feel this way emotionally and physically caged in their circumstances. Wishing and hoping they could fly away. I love always a caged bird poem. And i cant but admire, i can heat those tones sad and sweet too through your words. Pleasure always reading your work: best wishes for the contest