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A Broken Person

In some new life of do or die I pondered what to be I thought about the reason why Until it came to me The promise of a dream come true Was written in my heart The freedom of an ocean blue Was just a world apart An empty canvass called to me In paint-by-number thrills My vision of eternity Would hardly pay the bills My calling was to navigate The fog that boxed me in To pick and choose my goodly fate And calculate a win If Father Zeus remembered me In all my victories won Then Mother Goose remanded me Before the day was done My self-esteem belittled more Than battled for my dreams The rainclouds of my nevermore Were battering my schemes I should've been content to live My life as I saw fit To settle down with those who give A hoot before they quit My aspiration followed me To land my true vocation But constipation hindered me Before I left the station I might’ve been the kindly youth Who barely made the grade Who followed blindly for the truth Behind a loud parade The vision of an older man Is still the better choice The promise of a bolder plan Is waiting for my voice.

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Date: 7/26/2021 12:33:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
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Bryan Norton
Date: 7/26/2021 8:16:00 AM
Thank you for reading, Beata. Take care now, Bryan.
Date: 7/25/2021 3:10:00 AM
Another excellent poem Bryan. Rhyme. Cadence. Skilled story telling. 3 big ticks. Congratulations. Cheers - Gary
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Bryan Norton
Date: 7/26/2021 8:17:00 AM
Thanks, Gary. Always great to hear from you.
Date: 7/24/2021 11:14:00 PM
A beautiful rhyme on a broken person. Rings in the ears. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/24/2021 10:43:00 PM
Superb rhythm here 8-6-8-6, eloquently penned! Congrats on your win, Bryan
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Date: 6/29/2021 6:31:00 PM
Nicely done, Bryan, fantastic rhyme.
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Bryan Norton
Date: 7/1/2021 8:57:00 AM
Thank you very much, Eve. As you can tell, I do enjoy my rhyme. Best wishes, Bryan.
Date: 6/27/2021 1:33:00 PM
I prefer the short poems, but you did really well with this, Bryan. I saw this challenge and thought to myself "how the heck can I ever approach this one?" Anyway, it might be one of the judges who never places me, and in that case, I will not try at all.
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Date: 7/24/2021 10:46:00 PM
Ah! But we write for ourselves, dear Andrea, not for any judge :)
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Bryan Norton
Date: 7/1/2021 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, dear. Have a great day. Bryan