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Author's Note:  This particular poem is a quite sad one and is a very poetic description of "A Broken Heart," rendered in the Villanelle poetic format.  This poem is a continuation of my ongoing exploration and examination of what happens and what thoughts occur when a person (in this case -- a man) finds himself in the progressive aftereffect of a relationship torn asunder.  In this sense, I believe the poem speaks for itself.   (Gary Bateman - November 14, 2014) (Villanelle)

Categories:  allegory, anger, betrayal, break up, depression, heartbroken, and imagery.

A Broken Heart I have a broken heart so sad with sorrow, My love’s full of such anguish and fear; My soul’s afire with pain for the morrow. My heart seeks such a palliative yarrow, My thoughts are shattered, no longer clear; I have a broken heart so sad with sorrow. My desire’s gone, a victim of a much harrow, My emotions are awry and bring no cheer; My soul’s afire with pain for the morrow. Your anger strikes my heart like a poison arrow, Your evil intent revealed with no sugary veneer; I have a broken heart so sad with sorrow. I live my life now with no surcease of sorrow, Your former love declarations ring now so *****; My soul’s afire with pain for the morrow. My spirit’s in tatters from your hateful harrow, And your face now haunts me with a nasty leer; I have a broken heart so sad with sorrow. My soul’s afire with pain for the morrow. Gary Bateman, Copyright © All Rights Reserved, November 14, 2014 (Villanelle)

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Date: 6/26/2015 3:10:00 PM
My broken heart came even more when I lost my father 23 hours after I gave birth to my 3rd son, he was my best friend my all,i saw him suffer illness 19 years but always laughed and joked such childlike faith. Rated this poem 7 both times because it speaks to me well and I understand it well, God bless you
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Date: 6/29/2015 7:17:00 PM
Hello Diana, Again I'm gratified so much that you enjoyed this poem and found its theme and meaning to be to relevant to your experiences. Enduring adversity and the challenges thrown at each and every one of us in our lives, I believe, make us all stronger and more compassion in the end. I will be "64" on October 14th, and I've had my share of challenges surviving a full military career and seeing so very sad things over the years. At least know, as a poet I'm putting my pen to paper to reach as many people as I can with the themes I write about the messages I hope they take away from my writes. No matter what I write about, at the end of the day, I'm an eternal optimist -- without a doubt!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 6/26/2015 3:06:00 PM
This is very good and expressive, a broken heart can take long time to heal, I never really got over my mother leaving home when I was a young teen, took like forever to try get things round my head, but I know she did what she had to do for own peace of mind, but sometimes the pain feels just like yesterday, God has healed my heart and showed me it was not my fault she left I was just a kid I did no wrong, but she needed to get out, I relate to this poem,
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Date: 6/29/2015 7:08:00 PM
Hello Diane, I've been gone for the last three days or so. Yes -- I understand and do agree with you that at "Broken Heart" can take a long time to heal. And, in many instances, the scars run deep and remain although one may have recovered from the initial trauma. All of us at one time or another in our respective lives do face or have faced similar challenges. I'm very pleased that you were able to relate to my theme of "A Broken Heart" in this Villanelle write!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 6/26/2015 8:49:00 AM
The use of repetition brings the emotion home. I enjoyed your Villanelle. Thanks for viewing mine.
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Date: 6/26/2015 9:17:00 AM
Thanks so much Richard for your read here. I enjoyed your Villanelle as well. (I've got a couple of subjects I'm considering for possible Villanelle writes. I've got them lined up with several other themes I'm presently working on.) Best Wishes Always, Gary
Date: 11/25/2014 8:24:00 AM
A Lovely poem. I'm refreshed reading through your lines.Thanks for the share. Definitely a 7
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Date: 11/25/2014 2:44:00 PM
Funom, Thanks so much for your read here. Glad you enjoyed this Villanelle write. And thanks for the "7" rating!! I will drop by to check out your poetry as well. Nice to meet you too!! Please feel free to take a read of my poetry any time you desire. Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/17/2014 1:37:00 AM
O Gary my dear friend this is such wrenchingly sad poem of loves betrayal. I feel like crying for this poor man portrayed in your very sad story.love betrayal is one of the saddest and most painful things to go thru and there more. It's not only love but trust being destroyed from hearts. A 7 for me! Keep your ink flowing! love and hugs! xxxx D.
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Date: 11/17/2014 4:19:00 PM
"D" -- Although I'm very much a multi-thematic writer, I've developed a passion for writing romantic pieces. If one writes about the good side, then one must also delve into the bad side. Love is a most emotive force. When all is good -- fine, but when it turns South -- look out!! Loved and Trust do go hand-in-hand!! Best!! Gary XOXO
Date: 11/14/2014 6:26:00 PM
powerful piece of writing gary deep touching pen ringing so sad true
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Date: 11/14/2014 9:13:00 PM
Me Thinks Liam that me writin' here had a wee bit touch of the Irish in it with all the sadness and melancholy in it. Time to wash it down with some Irish!! Best Mate, Gary
Date: 11/14/2014 4:07:00 PM
We understand something in the degree we have experienced it and we suffer in the degre We do not accept it. The depth of your poem shows the grandor of the soul and the might of the heart's love. You have spoken with the voice of truth and have achieved a marvelous result. A seven for content and form my friend, Gary!
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Date: 11/14/2014 4:59:00 PM
Demetrios, Thank you so much for your most insightful and marvelous reply here. You've very much captured exactly what I attempting to emphasize with my write here. Looks like my use of the Villanelle format aided in highlighting my theme even more. Have a wonderful weekend my good friend!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/14/2014 3:50:00 PM
Heartwrenching..Sad but so powerful the way you make the reader feel the emotions ...Tmfavs
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Gary Bateman
Date: 11/14/2014 5:01:00 PM
Thanks Charmaine!! I do really appreciate your read here and what you've noted about the feeling of the emotions with this particular write. Best Wishes Always!! Gary
Date: 11/14/2014 2:28:00 PM
Very sad song...I feel the pains...The Almighty bless us...
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Date: 11/14/2014 3:24:00 PM
Thanks Sandip. I really appreciate your read and your comments!! Best Always, Gary
Date: 11/14/2014 1:44:00 PM
I love the form you used for this Gary - it makes it very powerful indeed with the repeated lines - may try this form one day:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 11/14/2014 3:28:00 PM
Thanks Jan for your read and comments here. This is the first time I've rendered a poem in this Villanelle format. It's a little tricky to put together, but as you've noted, the result can be quite powerful!! Have a great weekend!! Best Always, Gary