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A Brilliant Young Actor

She came with a purpose
It was gone in  a minute
She hated his fiction
But she found herself in it

It was taxing to love him
His gain was her loss
And brushing his shoulder
Had come at a cost

She cherished his words
But he lied when he talked
So she swallowed her tongue
Till the carousel stopped

And she said you don't love me
But he knew how to act
So he cradled her hand
And he took off his hat

He said you've gone crazy!
Your all that I need
And he kissed her by moonlight
Until she believed

And she vowed she would leave him
But she was decieved
By a brilliant young actor
With tricks up his sleeve

By Kyle Ezra Kriticos

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/4/2020 11:01:00 PM
This is just great stuff ... great rhythm and phrasing, but more so fun to read and a great message. Despite all the technical "elements" folks look for, poetry, reading AND writing, should be about enjoyment and emotion. Adding to my faves - wish you were around more, Kyle! - the bard
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Date: 12/4/2016 11:37:00 AM
I just saw your poem today... fabulous!!!! Gripping and encompassing!! Well done! Big Hugggs!! Cap'n Deb
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Date: 12/3/2016 11:39:00 PM
Great poem. I have seen this poem play out so many times.
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Date: 11/28/2016 11:50:00 AM
I love this write....the timing is sublime...and I'm picky... when it comes to ..who I admire...niccceee.
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Date: 5/28/2011 4:53:00 PM
Deep interesting thougt provoking write my friend...
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