A Blue Odyssey-An Adventure in Paradise

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June 04, 2024 For Anoucheka Gangabissoon Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Thrilling explorations enlivened with adventure, As my soul longs for a most special blue venture. The indulgent warmth of the sun revitalized me, Once having landed in this paradisiacal arcady. Palm twigs drift in a gentle breeze, Infinite stretches of exquisite white sand seas. Crystal-clear waters define a sapphire-sand idyll, Archipelago of high-quality atoll and island tidal. The locals saluted me with such a wide smile, Their warmth and compassion are a lifestyle. Finding heaven filled me with immense pride, Embraced by the breathtaking scenery to abide. Weeks turned into months, and days went away, As I danced beneath the sky, I felt freed to sway. However, an enormous urge sprang from inside, For the sake of my native nation and kin pride. I finally reached a choice as time passed, I started to obsess over my house, never stashed. The island, however, will stay in my mind, I retain them as a spiritual treasure left behind.

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/30/2024 7:07:00 PM

A very grand illustration with feelings of romance and nostalgia. Congratulations!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/30/2024 12:04:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading about your island write. I hope you are OK. I wish you would write more... Have a very fun day writing away...........

Tonye George

Date: 6/8/2024 8:55:00 AM

Luxurious vocabulary is infused in this astounding piece Dear Sotto. Some things cannot leave our thoughts. "The island, however, will stay in my mind, I retain them as a spiritual treasure left behind." A lovely way to put it. You have such a great talent and ways with words, depth and structure. Cheers.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 6/6/2024 9:06:00 AM

SP, Sounds like a superb visit and change of lifestyle. The music you posted gets more complex at the end with the guitar and piano solos (yes I listened) and the ending of the piece does instill a sadness that its over. However, the theme in the music was very simple and I can still hear it in my mind. Your poem does the same for me. You illustrate with words how we never forget where we've been. It is as you say a real treasure to be able to think back on it.

Ink Empress

Date: 6/4/2024 10:20:00 AM

Very exotic lines throughout this islandish poem, youv used words that fit the theme of island nature very well here! Brilliant rhymes too! I especially loved the lines “ Weeks turned into months, and days went away, As I danced beneath the sky, I felt freed to sway. ” beautiful flow! And love the crystal clear waters and sapphire sand! Must be white sapphire! Pleasure reading your work. Best wishes for the contest! I think youv described a tropical island very well