Joanna Daniel Poet Tanka

A Bird's First Flight

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new wings carry you 

soft breeze favours first flutter 

floating through the blue 

on these wings of poetry

I enter your paradise




(2nd August, 2016)

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Kim Rodrigues August 8, 2026 at 2:08 PM Love how you formed this! Congrats!

Suzette Richards August 2, 2026 at 10:08 PM Congratulations, Jo. Your topographic layout was unusual and ties in well with the Metapoetry theme of your tanka.

JC Brul August 2, 2026 at 10:02 PM "on these wings of poetry I enter your paradise" what a lovely statement! Congratulations Joana ^____^ JCB

Andrea Dietrich August 2, 2026 at 7:27 PM Wow. What a great entry to her contest. Congrats on a well deserved win

Joseph May April 23, 2017 at 10:30 AM Beautifully penned Jo...A7

Paul Callus August 6, 2016 at 8:59 AM A 7 for your creativity, Jo! Such a lovely poem! Now I'll have to grow me wings:) Congrats on your fine win. Regards // paul

Charlie Smith August 5, 2016 at 7:36 AM Nicely done, congratulations Jo...

Alexis Y. August 4, 2016 at 11:07 PM Hi Jo, I enjoyed the imagery as well as well your creativity .Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis

Sandra Haight August 4, 2016 at 10:42 PM Jo, congratulations on your placement in the contest. I love the imagery in your nature Tanka. 7 Hugs, Sandra

Andrea Dietrich August 4, 2016 at 5:38 PM Wish this one had gotten higher. i still love it. Congrats on the winner list

Beautiful Scars August 4, 2016 at 4:43 PM a lovely tanka sweet Jo, congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Andrea Dietrich August 3, 2016 at 6:12 AM I agree with Caycay, VERY creative. i loved it.

CayCay Godwin August 2, 2016 at 9:19 PM Lovely, Jo - creative presentation, too! CayCay

Eve Roper August 2, 2016 at 1:04 PM wonderful tanka, Jo,

Nette Onclaud August 2, 2016 at 12:39 PM ohh, you soar through this delightful tanka, jo... great last line!..huggs

Daniel Turner August 2, 2016 at 11:18 AM My wings still have problems with updrafts. Excellent poetry Jo. High marks from me!

Anne-Lise Andresen August 2, 2016 at 8:52 AM - So beautifully described, Jo :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Cheryl Hoffman August 2, 2016 at 8:36 AM Love this simple but full of bird symbolism poem; also how you put the poetry word in the v bird formation!:)

John Hamilton August 2, 2016 at 8:35 AM Just wonderful, looks like you've mastered the Tanka. Your poetry is certainly taking flight, gaining momentum, you deserve even more readers, this is poetry in motion. A7

John Lawless August 2, 2016 at 8:25 AM AH, soaring on the wings of poetry....