A Battle To Exist

Deep pain bores into scalp as eyelids struggle to open;
Glaring sun menaces eyes as they face the sky boldly.
First thought dawns on me like elixir; I'm alive!
The vast blue sky seems to smile upon my spirit holy.

Hands try to grasp hot sand as I wade to turn on stomach.
Pitiless grains escape between my fingers, mockingly.
In tremendous effort, I crawl to nearest patch of shade.
My heart pumps heavily while sweat oozes out profusely. 

Images flash; I'm pushed off yacht by lover unfaithful.
Mock inability to swim; I acted it wisely.
His satisfied grin is all I could see before diving.
Skills of past champion revived, I swam courageously.

This virgin island, is haven to me now; 
Life's strong in me! Branches I shove away, decisively.
Cautious exploration; Travelers trees welcome me.
With stick sharp I poke at it, water flows abundantly!

I do drink to my content and refresh myself while hares
jump around; I whisper to them and one stops daringly.
"Angel" I mumble as I follow it; on water melon I stumble.
Food! Hit with stone; humid sweet red flesh to wolf greedily.

Twigs, I gather and "SOS" I draw on the white expanse.
Angel from hole, under branched tree, beckons me temptingly.
A red bird hovers; branches dry and green, some Ravenala leaves,
enough to give me most desired tree lodge, marvelously. 

"Now, some thorough exploration." Angel nods approval.
Disgust filled heart softens and I long to hug her fondly.
On other side of island, I land in a rocky area.
Good heaven! Rainwater is trapped in a pond; so lovely.

The sun sets the direction and I venture inland.
Swarm of mosquitoes invade my burnt skin, voraciously.
I run like a mad to land among wild peppermint.
No mosquito here…repellent herbs! I deduce quickly.

Handfuls I pluck, to rub on my body at night.
My watermelon shell, now dry, serves me efficiently.
Pipik, my red bird and Angel watch "friends, how to light this tinder nest?"
Eureka! here, my heart shaped glass pendant gleams suddenly.

Settled nearly for a week now, hope never leaves me.. I'm to live!


2/02/17
2nd and 4th line of each quatrain has 14 syllable.
(checked on howmanysyllable.com)

Placed 4th on 6 winners (judged 7/02/17) Tropical Island by Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 3/31/2017 1:53:00 PM
You wrote a beautiful tale of hope an survival my friend. Superbly crafted with great imagination, imagery and detail.. A7
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 4/4/2017 5:42:00 AM
Thanks for the visit and inspiring comment and the rating. Good luck :) Sunita
Date: 2/14/2017 1:50:00 AM
Congratulations Sunita. Good write and survival, two in one. Many wishes, Kai
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/14/2017 12:29:00 PM
Thanks so much Kai for the visit and applause. Appreciate what you say. God bless you. :))
Date: 2/8/2017 12:09:00 PM
congratulations Sunita on your win, this is a wonderful piece of writing a joy to read, Roy.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/8/2017 10:43:00 PM
Thanks for the read and applause. Much appreciated. GL to you. :) Sunita
Date: 2/8/2017 10:29:00 AM
Congratulations Sunita on your 4th place win with creative write. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/8/2017 11:24:00 AM
Thanks for the visit and appreciation. You did very well too. GL :)
Date: 2/8/2017 1:00:00 AM
Thanks Shadow for appreciating this poem and its placement. I'm so glad it was up to expectation. Thanks for the contest.Congrats to all the winners and those not selected too, for effort put in. :)) Reg Sunita
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Date: 2/6/2017 11:57:00 PM
Wow what imagination. A lady tossed out to sea near a virgin island!! And the survival tricks amazingly collected in poem. Roast hare though. Luv watermelons. Kudos.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/7/2017 1:57:00 AM
Thanks Zaynab for the nice comment. But hare is my friend and company. I write it from my POV, a veggie! :D :D
Date: 2/5/2017 7:00:00 PM
wow, sunita. I have not really read entries to this particular contest. but THIS ought to top the chart because you really made it come to life. Great island survival tale.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/5/2017 7:45:00 PM
Oh your comment is so encouraging...I really hope though I exceeded by one line. Anyways.. hope the focus is on the essentials of the adventure. You are one of the elites and your feedback so valuable. Thanks :)
Date: 2/5/2017 1:04:00 PM
Phew. Pretty intense read. Splendidly written. Took my brain 100 different directions, all of which they enjoyed
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/5/2017 7:41:00 PM
Thanks for the read and constructive feedback. I do appreciate. GL :)
Date: 2/5/2017 5:35:00 AM
- A wonderful told story, Sunita - Interesting reading ... although it is a long poem ... I would recommend this with all my heart :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/5/2017 9:58:00 AM
Really enchanted by appreciation and good judgement. I condense length to be in limit of 36 lines. More, would have interrupted the flow and some criteria missed. I'm so glad you like it. Thanks lot Sunshine. God bless you. :)
Date: 2/4/2017 11:50:00 AM
Very smart to feign an inability to swim, Sunita, especially when you are a champion swimmer. And it seems you knew just what to do to survive when you reached the island. I admire your strength and enjoyed reading of this adventure. Well done!
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/4/2017 10:15:00 PM
Thanks Carolyn. Really appreciate your visit and such nice comment. Glad you enjoyed the adventure. Good luck to you! :)
Date: 2/4/2017 7:27:00 AM
We all need an Angel at our side in the battle to survive...Very nicely penned Sunita
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/4/2017 11:00:00 AM
Animals feel better company when just been disillusioned...:) Thanks for the read. GL.
Date: 2/3/2017 10:51:00 PM
A very captivating narration, full of entertainment. Loved it thoroughly.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/4/2017 2:51:00 AM
Thanks fr the reading and enjoying it. Your visit much appreciated. :)
Date: 2/2/2017 2:18:00 PM
I believe you might survive, Sunita. A most entertaining read:) Good luck!
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 2/2/2017 9:32:00 PM
:D Sure... when hurt and cheated, a woman's determination strengthens!!(in this context)...Thanks for the supporting comment. Good luck to you. Sunita :)
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