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A Brother'S Thanks

9/7/15/9:50:37:A.M. Re-write- 4/5/16-4:21:18 A.M Why do we write in this strange way Just to express what we must say? A curse,a gift It's all the same Like Shakespeare said''What's in a name'' I speak I love I laugh I live Though all is so simply fake The world isn't the same without all of ya'll A feeling I can't seem too shake I wake this day with air in my lungs and I could see Even still I complain what more is there to be? The looks I get now aren't of envy nor lust just sadness;pity The irony is they would be blessed to be one of us With my brother we can stand tall, leaning on each other so neither may fall Without him I dare not think, writing this makes me crave a drink No words may say how I think of thee Without you there is no me Like his shadow once was I Racing here and skating there,copying mannerisms Silly games like truth or dare. Sharing girls not knowing the other had To women,I guess brothers were the fad. Not to boast for neither not pleased at all but yet in still -It was fun and we had our fill Not of lust but friends for life, who would have thought Finally something money need not bought. Thank you Father for leaving him with me and I with him as many as you taken from us many think the light would be dim. Not in our blood just not our way,not identical but closer each and every day.

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Date: 4/8/2016 12:53:00 PM
Full marks for this sincere and expressive poem, Jai. I was wondering if it was just you two....we were 7 brothers and sisters; I say 'were' because one died) and on the whole we always got on well together; we still see a lot of each other! ~ Regards // paul
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Jai Bankson
Date: 7/27/2016 3:13:00 AM
That came out way wrong,my apologies,I know you know what I meant..Justin
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/9/2016 3:44:00 PM
Best news I've heard this week.sorry for your loss but great to hear the rest of you are like you are.a rarity no a days.My families were 8,7,4,all a lot and close.We were'' just us'' and step brothers,sisters in and out of marriages.We were ''just us''Wouldn't have wanted it anyway differently Sir!Best wishes! Justin
Date: 4/8/2016 9:55:00 AM
Jai, this is BEAUTIFUL, I felt the love in every word, fantastic writing 7 or should I say 9.9, lol
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/9/2016 3:36:00 PM
Thank you my very much my Unbroken Winged Angel.Ironically before I came to our crazy little family''Soup'' most of my writing,painting,almost everything I put my hands on came out a little darker,not much light.Not on purpose just more a Cherokee ending instead of an ''American story''More my style but the Natives did have some beautiful stories as well.Actually,Better.lol.Thank you! Justin
Date: 4/7/2016 11:19:00 PM
Poets, I think, are a niche group. I showed my brother a poem I wrote one time, and all I got was "cool" (while on the flip-side it made my mom cry) ... and to make things weirder, neither reaction was expected! You never know what will happen when you put pen to paper (though I guess in today's world "fingers to keys" might be more appropriate!) ... but maybe that's half the fun!
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/7/2016 11:41:00 PM
Thats the ironic thing,he's a musician!If If I write him some lyrics its a different story..Your right about the niche group,It's OUR language,not really something you can learn to speak.Well,I don't know maybe you can but I haven't met anyone yet.Like to think that anyway.
Date: 4/7/2016 9:59:00 PM
I got an introspective look into your soul with this one, Jai ... and it's engaging. I think your brother would delight in this dedication you wrote for him ... I was always close with my brother who is 20 months older, and yet, as life would have it, we hardly have anything in common ... strange how that happens.
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/7/2016 11:04:00 PM
I really appreciate that,he hates poetry just because''in his words''I don't get it''I actually showed him and I got a smile.Thats a lot for him.The next day we almost got in a fight on the highway.We fixed it an hour later lol.Thanx again Timothy Jai
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/7/2016 10:00:00 PM
"Thank you Father for leaving him with me and I with him as many as you taken from us many think the light would be dim." ... emotionally gripping and thought provoking. How crazy to think all the stuff life throws at it, and how yet, given time, we move on, and learn to be happy all the same again. This was worth the read, my friend.
Date: 4/5/2016 9:59:00 PM
You are truly a heartfelt and passionate writer, Jai. I like the way this piece is formatted as well as the content. Those last two lines are my favorite lines of the piece. Very very hardhitting! I felt a lot of emotions with this one. Always, Laura
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/7/2016 8:35:00 PM
Thank you very much,it was a happy accident on the format and poem,I got to the middle and re wrote everything in two seconds without a thought.The original was just about how poets write and why.Gotta love it...thank you again Jai
Date: 4/5/2016 5:40:00 AM
Good morning Jai... wow! I have three boys, but each in their own world, different in every way. I'd give up my right arm for them to lean on one another, go out with the same girls without knowing. LoL... one is a workaholic, I have a gamer, then I have the wrestler wannabe ...lol... your poem made me think about them, and how they live under the same roof, but far from ever feeling close, or thankful. Did you raise your brother? I was moved by your words. A 7 from me to you... Luv. Linda
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Jai Bankson
Date: 4/5/2016 8:46:00 AM
Good morning..Every one thinks I'm the oldest,don't know why.I love that though,No I followed him every where he would allow plus his friends were my friends,So when I was ten I got to hang out with the fourteen year old girls and guys''the cool kids'' until I got a ''little'' sense.He's got four years on me but it mine as well be zero.We still fight like children but when it comes to each other their is no one I would want in my corner and now it's just the two of us.Thank God we still have each other..even crazier we've lived all over the nation with each other and haven't killed each other yet.Our father always said no matter what to watch after each other and here we are...Thank you very much Madam Justin