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33 rpm


because so it is,
he says

ashtray's empty
and
Dolly Parton
cries
for
Jolene
spinning dizzy
in the
corner
 
in my mind
all words
leave the
paper
 
love laid to rest,
I can
recognize
the 
smell.


© Gry W Christensen


(My take on "Relationships". My entry in the "Relationships" contest, ending Aug.  25. )

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/18/2014 8:15:00 PM
GRY, thank you for the reply
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Date: 7/30/2014 1:51:00 PM
Ahhh, another impacted ending! The smell of love varies upon who is sniffing its value. Wonderfully done!
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Gry Christensen
Date: 8/3/2014 11:35:00 AM
Hei Drake, yes, precisely! Many thanks for your nice comments, I appreciate them.
Date: 7/29/2014 1:19:00 PM
Hi Gry, Congratulations, on your awesome win.... Love Linda
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Date: 8/3/2014 11:34:00 AM
Hi Linda :) Thank you so much!
Date: 7/29/2014 3:12:00 AM
Gry, back to say congrats on your wonderful winning write!
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Date: 8/3/2014 11:34:00 AM
Hi Dave, thank you so much, how nice of you! :) Sorry, for late feedback, having visitors from abroad.
Date: 7/28/2014 7:37:00 PM
Back again to see this fine win my friend!!!!! Huge congrats!!!
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Date: 7/28/2014 10:15:00 PM
Thank you so much, Robert! And so many congrats back! So nice of you to drop me such sweet words.
Date: 7/28/2014 9:48:00 AM
Hi Gry, huge congratulations on your fine well-deserved win. Pandita
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Date: 7/28/2014 11:21:00 AM
Hello Pandita, Thanks for once again stopping by me and give me so nice feedback, but as mentioned underneath, I don't know what I supposedly won..........I don't think this contest is over yet. Best,Gry
Date: 7/28/2014 7:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your fine win, Gry. Kika
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Date: 7/28/2014 11:20:00 AM
Hello Kika, thank you for reading and commenting. But I don't understand what I have won? As far as I know this contest isn't over yet..? I am looking very much forward to read your poems. All the best,Gry
Date: 7/28/2014 5:04:00 AM
Nice take on relationship, Gry. congrats
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Gry Christensen
Date: 7/28/2014 7:02:00 AM
Hello, I am very grateful for your kind feedback! I am glad you like my poem. Looking forward to read your poetry, it's always great to discover new poets. Thanks again!
Date: 7/26/2014 5:15:00 PM
Gry, masterful!
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Date: 7/26/2014 6:08:00 PM
Hi Dave, thank you for stopping by, read and leave a comment. I'm glad you like it. I also wish you good luck in the contest, I read your great lyrics and saw you have entered too. :)
Date: 7/26/2014 3:32:00 PM
Awesome write, dear Gry! Gl in the contest my friend.. Hugs.. Arlene
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Date: 7/26/2014 6:04:00 PM
Hi Arlene, thanks so much! I appreciate your nice feedback. I truly enjoy reading your poetry, you write so clever and funny!
Date: 7/25/2014 9:36:00 PM
You , my friend nailed a good one with this. A great write that sends its message so very well!!
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Date: 7/25/2014 9:53:00 PM
Hi Robert, thank you always! I tried to capture the mood in the whole relationship, without saying too much about it. I appreciate you took the time to read and leave me feedback! :)
Date: 7/25/2014 8:53:00 PM
wow, this is so succinctly done,it very effectively gives the tone of ending a relationship. I love the image of the spinning record. Loved the Jolene song!! I bet some of the younger generation don't even GET the part about "spinning dizzy" hahaha. I have students who never saw record players OR dial phones before. GREAT job.
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Date: 7/25/2014 9:50:00 PM
Hi Andrea, thanks so much for your comment! You pretty sum it all up. :) I love Jolene too, and it's lyrics was very fitting for this relationship. The title is from this playing of the song ; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=doz1QJ7LwjA where the record is slowed down to 33 rpm, it sounds like blues almost, also fitting the mood. And yes, Jolene was not the only one dizzy in the room, my mind too. :)
Date: 7/25/2014 7:05:00 PM
Thank you, for considering my comment to be okay. I did not want to draw a wrong premise, without asking first.. Linda
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Gry Christensen
Date: 7/25/2014 7:10:00 PM
You are free to interpret my poem the way you want, according to how you read it. :) It's about a relationship, that's all I will say.............
Date: 7/25/2014 6:26:00 PM
Gry, this is an interesting take, on free verse. may I ask what the smell is? I'm interested in reading this poem again. Is it a divorce or something? I did enjoy... Linda
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