33 Rpm

because so it is, he says ashtray's empty and Dolly Parton cries for Jolene spinning dizzy in the corner in my mind all words leave the paper love laid to rest, I can recognize the smell. © Gry W Christensen (My take on "Relationships". My entry in the "Relationships" contest, ending Aug. 25. )

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/18/2014 8:15:00 PM

GRY, thank you for the reply

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/30/2014 1:51:00 PM

Ahhh, another impacted ending! The smell of love varies upon who is sniffing its value. Wonderfully done!

Gry Christensen
Date: 8/3/2014 11:35:00 AM

Hei Drake, yes, precisely! Many thanks for your nice comments, I appreciate them.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/29/2014 1:19:00 PM

Hi Gry, Congratulations, on your awesome win.... Love Linda

Gry Christensen
Date: 8/3/2014 11:34:00 AM

Hi Linda :) Thank you so much!

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/28/2014 7:37:00 PM

Back again to see this fine win my friend!!!!! Huge congrats!!!

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/28/2014 10:15:00 PM

Thank you so much, Robert! And so many congrats back! So nice of you to drop me such sweet words.

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/28/2014 9:48:00 AM

Hi Gry, huge congratulations on your fine well-deserved win. Pandita

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/28/2014 11:21:00 AM

Hello Pandita, Thanks for once again stopping by me and give me so nice feedback, but as mentioned underneath, I don't know what I supposedly won..........I don't think this contest is over yet. Best,Gry

Kika Ayala

Date: 7/28/2014 7:39:00 AM

Congratulations on your fine win, Gry. Kika

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/28/2014 11:20:00 AM

Hello Kika, thank you for reading and commenting. But I don't understand what I have won? As far as I know this contest isn't over yet..? I am looking very much forward to read your poems. All the best,Gry

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/28/2014 5:04:00 AM

Nice take on relationship, Gry. congrats

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/28/2014 7:02:00 AM

Hello, I am very grateful for your kind feedback! I am glad you like my poem. Looking forward to read your poetry, it's always great to discover new poets. Thanks again!

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/26/2014 3:32:00 PM

Awesome write, dear Gry! Gl in the contest my friend.. Hugs.. Arlene

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/26/2014 6:04:00 PM

Hi Arlene, thanks so much! I appreciate your nice feedback. I truly enjoy reading your poetry, you write so clever and funny!

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/25/2014 9:36:00 PM

You , my friend nailed a good one with this. A great write that sends its message so very well!!

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/25/2014 9:53:00 PM

Hi Robert, thank you always! I tried to capture the mood in the whole relationship, without saying too much about it. I appreciate you took the time to read and leave me feedback! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/25/2014 8:53:00 PM

wow, this is so succinctly done,it very effectively gives the tone of ending a relationship. I love the image of the spinning record. Loved the Jolene song!! I bet some of the younger generation don't even GET the part about "spinning dizzy" hahaha. I have students who never saw record players OR dial phones before. GREAT job.

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/25/2014 9:50:00 PM

Hi Andrea, thanks so much for your comment! You pretty sum it all up. :) I love Jolene too, and it's lyrics was very fitting for this relationship. The title is from this playing of the song ; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=doz1QJ7LwjA where the record is slowed down to 33 rpm, it sounds like blues almost, also fitting the mood. And yes, Jolene was not the only one dizzy in the room, my mind too. :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/25/2014 7:05:00 PM

Thank you, for considering my comment to be okay. I did not want to draw a wrong premise, without asking first.. Linda

Gry Christensen
Date: 7/25/2014 7:10:00 PM

You are free to interpret my poem the way you want, according to how you read it. :) It's about a relationship, that's all I will say.............

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/25/2014 6:26:00 PM

Gry, this is an interesting take, on free verse. may I ask what the smell is? I'm interested in reading this poem again. Is it a divorce or something? I did enjoy... Linda