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because so it is,
he says

ashtray's empty
and
Dolly Parton
cries
for
Jolene
spinning dizzy
in the
corner
 
in my mind
all words
leave the
paper
 
love laid to rest,
I can
recognize
the 
smell.


© Gry W Christensen


(My take on "Relationships". My entry in the "Relationships" contest, ending Aug.  25. )

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Poet Destroyer A

August 18, 2014 at 8:15 PM

GRY, thank you for the reply

Poet Tacito

July 30, 2014 at 1:51 PM

Ahhh, another impacted ending! The smell of love varies upon who is sniffing its value. Wonderfully done!

Gry Christensen

August 3, 2014 at 11:35 AM

Hei Drake, yes, precisely! Many thanks for your nice comments, I appreciate them.

Poet Destroyer A

July 29, 2014 at 1:19 PM

Hi Gry, Congratulations, on your awesome win.... Love Linda

Gry Christensen

August 3, 2014 at 11:34 AM

Hi Linda :) Thank you so much!

Robert Lindley

July 28, 2014 at 7:37 PM

Back again to see this fine win my friend!!!!! Huge congrats!!!

Gry Christensen

July 28, 2014 at 10:15 PM

Thank you so much, Robert! And so many congrats back! So nice of you to drop me such sweet words.

Pandita Sietesantos

July 28, 2014 at 9:48 AM

Hi Gry, huge congratulations on your fine well-deserved win. Pandita

Gry Christensen

July 28, 2014 at 11:21 AM

Hello Pandita, Thanks for once again stopping by me and give me so nice feedback, but as mentioned underneath, I don't know what I supposedly won..........I don't think this contest is over yet. Best,Gry

Kika Ayala

July 28, 2014 at 7:39 AM

Congratulations on your fine win, Gry. Kika

Gry Christensen

July 28, 2014 at 11:20 AM

Hello Kika, thank you for reading and commenting. But I don't understand what I have won? As far as I know this contest isn't over yet..? I am looking very much forward to read your poems. All the best,Gry

Dr.Ram Mehta

July 28, 2014 at 5:04 AM

Nice take on relationship, Gry. congrats

Gry Christensen

July 28, 2014 at 7:02 AM

Hello, I am very grateful for your kind feedback! I am glad you like my poem. Looking forward to read your poetry, it's always great to discover new poets. Thanks again!

Arlene Smith

July 26, 2014 at 3:32 PM

Awesome write, dear Gry! Gl in the contest my friend.. Hugs.. Arlene

Gry Christensen

July 26, 2014 at 6:04 PM

Hi Arlene, thanks so much! I appreciate your nice feedback. I truly enjoy reading your poetry, you write so clever and funny!

Robert Lindley

July 25, 2014 at 9:36 PM

You , my friend nailed a good one with this. A great write that sends its message so very well!!

Gry Christensen

July 25, 2014 at 9:53 PM

Hi Robert, thank you always! I tried to capture the mood in the whole relationship, without saying too much about it. I appreciate you took the time to read and leave me feedback! :)

Andrea Dietrich

July 25, 2014 at 8:53 PM

wow, this is so succinctly done,it very effectively gives the tone of ending a relationship. I love the image of the spinning record. Loved the Jolene song!! I bet some of the younger generation don't even GET the part about "spinning dizzy" hahaha. I have students who never saw record players OR dial phones before. GREAT job.

Gry Christensen

July 25, 2014 at 9:50 PM

Hi Andrea, thanks so much for your comment! You pretty sum it all up. :) I love Jolene too, and it's lyrics was very fitting for this relationship. The title is from this playing of the song ; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=doz1QJ7LwjA where the record is slowed down to 33 rpm, it sounds like blues almost, also fitting the mood. And yes, Jolene was not the only one dizzy in the room, my mind too. :)

Poet Destroyer A

July 25, 2014 at 7:05 PM

Thank you, for considering my comment to be okay. I did not want to draw a wrong premise, without asking first.. Linda

Gry Christensen

July 25, 2014 at 7:10 PM

You are free to interpret my poem the way you want, according to how you read it. :) It's about a relationship, that's all I will say.............

Poet Destroyer A

July 25, 2014 at 6:26 PM

Gry, this is an interesting take, on free verse. may I ask what the smell is? I'm interested in reading this poem again. Is it a divorce or something? I did enjoy... Linda

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