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22-Year-Old Deal Breaker

He proposed, wanted me to be his wife But I knew his son would cause too much strife A grown man with no goals His father he controls I gently said, “No, I want a good life.” In bed he lies, playing video games “No work to be found,” this lazy son claims Blames the economy Acts irresponsibly Sticks to his avatars; I use friends’ names *Entry for the Deal Killer contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 10/22/2020 12:23:00 PM
lol, enjoyed reading this, but I see it took me to an old one, when I'd clicked on a new post...
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Date: 11/22/2011 9:34:00 PM
see how much the world has turned just in the past 10 year or so ,so quick they become the wrongs never the right love duncan and ceizar xx
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Date: 11/18/2011 12:51:00 PM
Great job here Caroline. Too many people allow their children to control their lives and so as the child grows up he thinks he has the right to call all the shots for his parents and they should supply all his wants and needs for as long as they live. The parents have no life because they gave it all away to irresponsible shallow greedy children. The kids have no life because they never learned to fend for themselves. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/16/2011 12:36:00 PM
A sad and heart felt write, my friend
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Date: 11/16/2011 10:38:00 AM
When we marry, it's not just one. It's the whole darn family. SON OF A GUN!
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Date: 11/15/2011 7:49:00 PM
CArolyn,this is a great way to do that contest!! One thing, I think you mistakenly called it haiku when it's limerick form. I sure hope I can come up with something as clever.
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Date: 11/15/2011 4:59:00 PM
Wow, that's awful that a young man created so much friction, that you could not establish a relationship with his father! Makes me sad too! Well it must have been not to be! Great work!!
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Date: 11/15/2011 3:15:00 PM
an eye opener TRUTH~Great write. I think you hit the wrong form button! God bless you my friend!!!!!A great day to you!!!~^Rick
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Date: 11/15/2011 2:09:00 PM
You nailed it, Carolyn. There are a lot of these irresponsible dealers around these days. A sure winner. Love, daver
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Date: 11/15/2011 1:21:00 PM
That's the run don't walk sign. Tony
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