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SHE WEARS MY FACE

Posted by Diamond Chris on 7/22/2025 11:31:39 PM
Why is my face split in two? A twin I call her, Confident and beautiful, Funny and entertaining, Her smiles light up every room. A life of the party, Excellent in every word. A frown I like to wear, I leave the smiles to her, It suits just one of us. I think I'm not that pretty, The face we share says different, And even when people tell me, I think they speak of her. I hate when people see me, They want me to be her, They expect charm and charisma And then my jokes fall flat. I'm in my head a lot, Thinking how to become her. Never together we are Always one at every time. I cannot talk about her And she herself can't too, Cause then people would notice, She's one and I'm the same. A person I created, To make myself feel safe, But then she turned out, Better than I ever was. But only in her shadows, I find the solace I seek. And I hope that maybe someday, She's all that I'll become.

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Comment by Diamond Chris on 7/27/2025 1:18:10 AM

The entire structure was changed, it's not supposed to be like this. Check it out in my poems to see how it's supposed to be


Comment by Diamond Chris on 7/27/2025 1:17:02 AM

The entire structure was changed, it's not supposed to be like this


Comment by Raven Caldwell on 7/27/2025 12:38:35 AM

I feel like its a paragraph rather than a poem...a beautiful paragraph yes! But not a poem


Comment by Hilda Greenhough on 7/26/2025 10:27:04 PM

Whom amongst us doesn't carry a twin shadow. Your words were resounding and goes to my heart.


Comment by Diamond Chris on 7/23/2025 12:59:33 AM

The entire structure was changed, it's not supposed to be like this


Comment by ALEXANDER AMETE on 7/23/2025 12:43:14 AM

The content is ok; the structure, I am not sure. The poet persona aptly describes her twin sister whom "she created to make (herself) feel safe." But the random insertion of upper case within lines of the poem leaves readers/critics wondering where one line stops and where another begins. A careful arrangement of the free verse poem, as it appears, can improve the beauty of the poem and give readers a better understand of the poet's message.



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