Almost Perfect

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She glanced at herself
in the mirror behind
the receptionist 
and then once again 
in the hallway mirror
before taking the stairs down.
A man coming up towards her,
noticed her immediately
and almost lost his step.

She got in her car
and glanced in the mirror.
What was that?
She looked sideways.
There was something,
still something.

She called from the parking lot
to make another appointment.

She drove home
and huddled away from the light
and into her 
darkened house.

Almost perfect.
Almost.

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Douglas Brown

Date: 9/30/2024 9:23:00 AM

Thank you so much! This was from a real event at a dermatological surgery center. I was there for a procedure and saw a woman leaving. Appreciate your response.

Gry Christensen

Date: 9/29/2024 5:02:00 PM

Ohhh, this is relatable. One is one's own worst judge and beauty is often not recognized by oneself. Perfect is in the eyes of the beholder, whatever perfect is. I have said it before, years ago though, I really like your style and "the matter of fact" observant way of writing and constructing a poem's content.