When Stars Collect At Your Feet


 Beneath the parapet of God,  stars collect at your feet ! 
          like little old stars              lukewarm, tepid, warm 
They cool then fade                            into your open hand 
generating light and energy                through the fusion 
of your spectacular supernova,        soul*.
Reading a star is like reading                     your own heart, 
its mass is compressed                   filled with gravity 
and its only intention is                 to love and be loved...

analogystarsfree verse

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CayCay Jennings

Date: 8/28/2025 6:43:00 AM

Oh, Darling, I guess it's literally my brain - I can't tell which way to read, the lines are zig zagged on my screen and I'm failing in my attempt for clarity. I don't think the lines held as you intended. Very frustrating because it seems you wrote some very cool lines. I wanna know what you said about stars so I'm gonna pout, but still leave you, Poetry hugs ... CayCay No, got it. 2nd line has no caps but nevertheless starts a sentence, just read from left to full right. It is a wonderful poem, worth the brain struggle!

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:42:00 PM

I tried to do a new format, if you like I can send it to you straight in a line, its meant to be read straight across :)

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/28/2025 1:44:00 AM

Stars are fascinating and I often use them in my poems.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:41:00 PM

Yes stars are one of the greatest beauties of heaven Victor, thanks for the visit here.

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/27/2025 6:26:00 PM

great poem and message, the poem is so creative and fluid, enjoyed very much, tanks poet

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:41:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed the fluidity of the poem Yann, have a good night, :)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/27/2025 6:02:00 PM

I enjoyed your soothing poem. I, too, am fascinated with stars...not just for the light they emit but for the love they symbolize. Beautiful poem, Rose!

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:40:00 PM

The give off so much light, and yes they fascinate me to no end Sara, thanks for your visit

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/27/2025 11:59:00 AM

Lovely inspiring poetry. "Reading a star is like reading your own heart," large as a star compressed, each heart expandable to a Universe, awaiting enlightened manifestation.

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:40:00 PM

That light can spread easily from heart to heart when we are wide awake, Joe, :)

Robert Sidwell

Date: 8/27/2025 10:35:00 AM

Thoroughly enjoyed your poem! May we nurture all stars to continue to generate light and love!

Mystic Rose Rose
Date: 8/28/2025 6:39:00 PM

Always Robert, light is what we aim to partake in, thanks for leaving a comment, be well !