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TOUSLED SKY

TOUSLED SKY
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Thoughts upon feathered wings glide on a wind-tousled sky bringing me to the realization that achieving tranquility is possible....
in the silence deep
a world of thoughts, a universe
expands and contracts

universe within,
a guiding force navigates
the journey inward

in tranquility
wisdom's jeweled treasures found
mind and soul entwine

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Danny Derden Date: 9/15/2025 4:03:00 PM This is a beautifully meditative poem. The images of "feathered wings" and a "tousled sky" create a wonderful sense of peaceful movement. The haiku-like structure at the end is particularly effective, offering a quiet, introspective close. Login to Reply Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 9/15/2025 5:51:00 PM thank you, Danny, for dropping by and for your meaningful comments. Color me grateful. Have a great evening, Sara

Joe Dimino Date: 9/15/2025 3:14:00 PM Oneness. Inner and outer miracle combined. Beautiful writing. Login to Reply Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 9/15/2025 5:50:00 PM thank you, Joe, for stopping by and for commenting. color me grateful.

Line Gauthier Date: 9/15/2025 2:03:00 PM Beautiful, Sara ~ my favourite part is "in the silence deep / a world of thoughts, a universe / expands and contracts" Login to Reply Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 9/15/2025 5:50:00 PM thank you, Line. I appreciate your kind and complimentary words. Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara

Sam Kauffman Date: 9/15/2025 11:14:00 AM So lovely and so profound, dear Sara! Love the image of the "tousled" sky as a metaphor for the "tousled" journey the the soul - spirit and mind joined! If this is for a contest, best wishes! Blessings of tranquility to you! Login to Reply Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 9/15/2025 5:49:00 PM awww, thank you, Sam, for your positive and kind comments. Your words mean a great deal to me....no, not for a contest. Wrote this poem about a year ago and misplaced it. Glad I found it...have a blessed evening, Sara

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/15/2025 4:07:00 AM I enjoyed reading this one today, Sara B. Looking skyward always helps me put a different perspective on life. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K Login to Reply Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 9/15/2025 5:48:00 PM appreciate you stopping by, Sara K. Looking skyward always alters my perspective as well. Glad you enjoyed reading this poem. Grateful for your comments, have a blessed evening, Sara