Notes About The Poem

Numb Heart

He sits under the maple
on the bench they used to share,
surveys the flames of autumn
but within he’s cold and bare.
She left home with secret beau,
and her name is now taboo.

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6 Lines Max 
Bite Size Poem no19 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Line Gauthier
          Placed 3rd
© 2nd September 2021

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Jack Horne

Date: 11/18/2021 7:52:00 AM

so glad this sad but beautiful write was a winner

Paul Callus
Date: 12/2/2021 6:16:00 AM

Thank you, Jack. Hope you are keeping well, my friend. Regards // paul

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 9/20/2021 6:06:00 PM

Congrats on your well deserved placing. Your words use may be sussinct, but the meaning lingers on.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/24/2021 7:01:00 AM

Thank you for this visit, Scott, and pls excuse the late reply; for some reason your comment escaped my attention. Regards // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 9/16/2021 7:03:00 AM

How could she throw away such love, For one she barely knew. Beautifully written and so well expressed. God Bless, JB

Paul Callus
Date: 10/24/2021 7:03:00 AM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Judy. Like I just told Scott (above) your visit somehow escaped my attention. Best regards and blessings // paul

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 9/10/2021 8:32:00 AM

Wow, nice punch line…Delice

Paul Callus
Date: 9/12/2021 7:25:00 AM

Thank you, Delice. Hope you're enjoying the weekend. Regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/10/2021 6:40:00 AM

Sad reality beautifully expressed, my friend, Paul. Blessings.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/10/2021 7:00:00 AM

Thank you my friend. Regards & blessings to you too. // paul

Elaine George

Date: 9/9/2021 3:55:00 AM

Sure to be in the winner's circle, Paul. So much in so few words.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/9/2021 9:56:00 AM

Thank you for the faith you show in this humble poem, Elaine. It's a pleasure to have you back after your haitus. ~ Best regards, my friend // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/8/2021 8:41:00 PM

Great poetry, Paul. Sad but to the point. Love it.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/9/2021 10:09:00 AM

Thank you, Harry. Best regards // paul

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/8/2021 6:23:00 PM

Hello Paul ... talking about a lost love can really hurt a broken heart if mentioned - thank you Paul - Lindsay

Paul Callus
Date: 9/9/2021 10:18:00 AM

Lost love, irrespective of situation, can leave a a bitter taste which is hard to erase. Thank you for stopping by, my friend. Regards // paul

Carol B.

Date: 9/7/2021 5:10:00 PM

Such a sad situation. Your words evoked the emotions one would feel. Excellent poetry. Paul, I just wanted to let you know Armand has published a poetry book on Amazon. It’s being offered today on Amazon kindle for free today. https://www.amazon.com/Fifty-Three-Collection-Soul-Inspiring-Anthology-ebook/dp/B09BZP1K7B/ref=tmm_kin_swatch_0?_encoding=UTF8&qid=&sr=

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2021 9:37:00 AM

Thank you for your complimentary remarks, Carol. Thanks also for providing the link to Armand's book. I wish him all possible success. ~ Regards // paul

Beata Agustin

Date: 9/7/2021 4:47:00 AM

Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2021 9:35:00 AM

I am pleased you found it to your liking, Beata...thank you! Blessings // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2021 8:33:00 AM

It is so strange. I KNOW I saw this one and commented. Anyway, here I am again and not seeing my comment. I love this one, Paul. Congrats on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 9/8/2021 9:35:00 AM

Glitches often occur on this site, Andrea, so I'm not at all surprised. Thank you for liking and for the congrats. ~ Regards // paul

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/5/2021 10:41:00 AM

A fine write, Paul. I especially like the contrast between autumn's colors flaming + the cold world within the jilted. Best wishes, Brian

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2021 7:01:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Brian; pleased you liked the contrast. ~ Best regards // paul

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/4/2021 11:43:00 AM

A big CONGRATS on your win, Paul. Janice

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2021 6:53:00 AM

Thank you, Janice; a pleasure to have you stopping by...hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/4/2021 10:56:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a lovely/sad~story/write. A pretty fall picture. Have a blessed day/weekend...............

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2021 7:09:00 AM

Thank you, Paula. Enjoy the week ahead. Blessings // paul

Gary Radice

Date: 9/4/2021 10:52:00 AM

I envisage a falling of tears in amongst a falling of leaves and a heart that burns in the flames of Autumn. Your six lines of wonderful imagery had me reading your poem a few times Paul. Congratulations on your place with your beautifully poignant poem. Cheers - Gary

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2021 6:52:00 AM

Thank you for the insightful feedback and the congrats, Gary. I loved your winning entry!! Best regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 9/4/2021 8:11:00 AM

oh, so much said in so few lines - hope you are well, my friend

Paul Callus
Date: 9/6/2021 7:11:00 AM

Thank you, my friend. Your visits are always appreciated. Regards // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/3/2021 10:39:00 PM

Hi Paul, You painted such a heartbreaking scene with words in this well-written verse. I thought that she passed away, but now I see it's utter heartbreak. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great evening and weekend-Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 9/4/2021 2:39:00 AM

Thank you for your pleasant visit, Alexis. I don't blame you for being side-tracked...initially I nearly went that way myself :) Have alovely weekend, my friend. // paul