Intrusive Thoughts

A day so fine, no ills on my mind, then it's late and angst lays me down those rude intrusive thoughts those bruising, bad night thoughts They come at night, enter my head, when out the light and prone in bed. Lay me down with my brain's views and intrusive soon fiddles my pillow. Nighty, my sane fights madness that night covets as a faved toy. My good is erased, my sleep chased when in bed dread slaps my face. those rude intrusive thoughts those bruising, bad night thoughts
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Date: 7/27/2025 8:54:00 PM
I remember going to the doctor for a routine checkup one time, and it came out that I was having trouble getting to sleep, she asked me why...and my response was "because my mind won't be quiet!" I can understand all too well, but you said it far better than I could have. Outstanding! Keep up the good work CayCay! Your friend, Ron
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Date: 6/21/2025 11:28:00 PM
Well we all get such Cay Cay..' often the memory Of bad fruit we have borne.' May God Uplift your spirit.'
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Date: 6/15/2025 5:57:00 AM
Hello CayCay, I can relate to this, such nights are awful, hardly any sleep. Beautifully penned. Have a wonderful day my poet friend.
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Date: 6/14/2025 2:22:00 PM
Not sure if this is true for you, if so you have my sympathy. A finely detailed experience of nights like those.
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Date: 6/14/2025 5:45:00 AM
those bruising, bad night thoughts… and intrusive soon fiddles my pillow...some nights are toss’n turn… Hugs!
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Date: 6/14/2025 5:38:00 AM
those intrusive thoughts always creep in at night..i can relate, had sleep probs most of my life..thx for your comment on my work
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Date: 6/11/2025 9:06:00 PM
I used to have them, but now no longer. My wife was very caring. An introspective poem.
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Date: 6/11/2025 7:42:00 PM
Totally resonant, CayCay. Totally. ~ Lights Out
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Date: 6/11/2025 6:07:00 PM
Deep, I liked the refrain...those rude intrusive thoughts those bruising, bad night thoughts" added to the feel of this
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Date: 6/11/2025 1:00:00 PM
that pillow line is so cool, Caycay. And dread slapping your face. so funny. I HATE the dread feeling. I get it every morning if I wake up too early. I simply cannot go back to sleep knowing I only have an hour to go until work, and by then, i've used my quota of temazapan. Ugggg Insomnia sucks.
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Date: 6/11/2025 12:53:00 PM
Cay Cay, you have perfectly captured what often happens to me as well! I love the line " And intrusive soon fiddles my pillow" I am sure that many can relate!! Happy Wednesday xxoo
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Date: 6/11/2025 10:36:00 AM
The opening line hooked me. I am a sucker for interior rhymes. Thanks for sharing..............peace!
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Date: 6/11/2025 8:09:00 AM
Dear CayCay, this poem explains the pain that comes with anxiety and overthinking. It's always in the night when these thoughts come to the doorstep of the mind and knock loudly. Nicely penned! Best, Anne
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Date: 6/11/2025 4:54:00 AM
oh, those intrusive thoughts. I can keep them at bay during the day as long as I'm busy, but my subconscious and its dreams persist! like it!
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