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A Waterfall Came into Being

A small rock detached itself from a distant planet,
And through a NEBULA of pure darkness
Burned its way across the blackness of outer space
Rushed its way to far off Earth by passing its LUNAR orbit.
It left behind MYRIAD sparks all glistening, until
It hit a river on Earth and furrowed a subsidiary way
Till it reached a cliff and fell down in a CASCADE
Creating a deep pond and then a SERPENTINE river flowed on.

Through flowing streams of silver light, 
Soft winds blew a PHOSPHEROUS glow,
Producing a LILT of melodies that spread life 
Amongst the green ferns.   Now two small alligators
SLITHER towards the pond where fish had become plentiful.
Beware.  No swimming by request.


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Date: 6/12/2025 5:06:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your winning work in Lasaad's contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
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Date: 6/5/2025 10:16:00 AM
Wow what a wonderful creative write using all of Sotto’s words! Great job!
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Date: 6/4/2025 1:24:00 PM
Hi Victor, this is excellent poetry, but then, I wouldn't expect anything else from you. Your words hold the attention from beginning to end. They paint a beautiful canvas from space to the earth. You paint with such skill my friend. I wish you all the best in the contest with this wonderful work. Keep singing my friend. Your friend always ..... Mike.
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Date: 6/2/2025 6:59:00 AM
Amazing work using Lasaad's words for your work. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. It reads like a good contender to me. way to go. Sara K
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Date: 6/1/2025 11:44:00 AM
As always another amazing poem full of poetic imagery.. You really are the master of words dear Victor..
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Date: 6/1/2025 4:12:00 AM
WOW, effortless write! using those eight words with such expertise, phospherous glow and alligators slither- perfect. beautiful dear poet. Cheers.
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Date: 6/1/2025 2:41:00 AM
Dear Victor, your poem flows like a cosmic fairytale—starting with the birth of a meteor and ending in a lush, Earthly scene teeming with life and quiet danger. The imagery is vivid, and the transition from the celestial to the terrestrial is seamless and poetic. Love the use of words like 'myriad,' 'cascade,' and 'serpentine'—they add richness and rhythm. That final twist with the alligators was such a clever touch....Hugs
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Date: 6/1/2025 3:07:00 AM
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Date: 5/31/2025 4:54:00 PM
Victor, this reads like a myth forged from stardust and river stones. I love how the journey begins in the vastness of space and gently flows into Earth’s wild grace. The imagery of phosphorous glow and serpentine river was especially vivid--and those last lines with the alligators? A perfect, grounded twist after such a celestial opening. Beautifully done!
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Date: 5/31/2025 3:03:00 PM
This charming portrait of a waterfall's formation is hauntingly beautiful, Victor. It has great imagery and flow. :)
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Date: 5/31/2025 1:05:00 PM
- If there are alligators there, I don't dare swim :))) - A beauty is created, Victor :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 5/31/2025 10:33:00 AM
What a lovely write you have here. Great Picture... Wish I was sitting by your waterfall. "Good Luck" Have a lovely day writing away..................
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