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A Triad of Haiku V

A leaf detaches

From some resplendent, green twig.

All Summer shudders!
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The wind calling out,

Like a high, mewing buzzard,       

Behind nearby hills.   
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Winter came around...

Slipping in beneath the door

As I lit the fire.
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Rowena Velasco

Date: 8/21/2025 6:25:00 PM

Beautiful and vivid each haiku really captures the season’s mood.

John Fleming
Date: 8/22/2025 3:42:00 PM

Thanks for taking the time to visit, Rowena - and many thanks for the kind remarks - cheers! :) john

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/14/2025 12:45:00 AM

- Beautiful nature pictures, John :) - hugs

John Fleming
Date: 8/19/2025 3:06:00 PM

Thanks, Anne-Lise. I always appreciate your kind and warm remarks. :) john

Valsa George

Date: 8/13/2025 9:12:00 PM

'The wind calling out like a buzzard.... 'Love the comparison. When Eagles soar overhead, as a child, I have observed mother hen calling out to the chicks to alert them on danger. A beautiful set of haikus.

John Fleming
Date: 8/19/2025 3:05:00 PM

Hello again, Valsa. Nice to see you calling again...you are always most welcome here. My very best regards! :) john

RGH Poetry

Date: 8/13/2025 6:00:00 PM

Wow! I know how hard it is to justice to a haiku, they are very beautifully written and with fantastic imagery too which can be rare.

John Fleming
Date: 8/19/2025 3:03:00 PM

I really do take pleasure in writing these Japanese style poems. I enjoy having to try and circumvent the impositions that the rules impose...wrestling with the rigidness for want of a better word. Many thanks, Ryan! :) john

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/13/2025 11:32:00 AM

So very cool! Shivering at the thought of the wind being compared to a buzzard. Sounds like the beginning of a murder mystery! Love the 3rd one!

John Fleming
Date: 8/13/2025 1:54:00 PM

Thanks, Kim. You are most kind! :) john

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/13/2025 5:50:00 AM

Stunning metaphors all around these haikus, conveying a wonderful seasonal scene

John Fleming
Date: 8/13/2025 6:05:00 AM

Thank you, S.P. You are very kind...I am most encouraged by your generous remarks. Always appreciated! :) john

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/13/2025 3:08:00 AM

Great haikus. I wrote a few but never managed to get the punch of a haiku.

John Fleming
Date: 8/13/2025 6:01:00 AM

Thanks for taking the time to both visit and comment, Victor. I always enjoy reading your remarks - and very much appreciated! :) john p.s have a go at a Tanka, Victor...gives one more scope for bringing it all together.