Alone on the Sea


Alone on the Sea

Desperate and alone I cling to my makeshift raft with all of the strength my weakened body can muster. The sun, once my friend is now a fierce and foreboding enemy. Glaring relentlessly overhead, heaven's great orb of fire which is often looked upon to bring life, is now quickly causing mine to evaporate, rapidly dissipating into its searing rays of death. Alone on the sea, this massive body of water that surrounds me, engulfs me. It tosses about my raft as if laughing at my situation, waiting patiently for me to become its next meal. Minutes seem like hours and hours feel like days as I have no food or water to sustain life. Not a cloud hovers above to perhaps bring a shower so that I may partake of its sweet and refreshing moisture and not a single fish have I seen which might satisfy my raging appetite.

My mind becoming delusional now, finds objects that seem so real but do not exist. On the horizon, a large vessel which once appeared to be sailing towards me is nothing more than a distant wave teasing my thoughts, my hopes and my dreams of somehow surviving this ordeal. I do not know how much more of this I can take as I feel I am slipping away, losing myself in the vast dark abyss. I float in and out of consciousness, finally coming to the realization that the end is very near.

It is now that an angel appears to me, her silhouette moving nearer. She floats so gracefully above me, golden hair blowing in the breeze. This must be it, the end has come. "Oh speak to me angel. Tell me what is to become of me," I cry.

Then her voice calls out my name, "Johnny."

It is clear as anything this lonely castaway of desperation could understand. The sound brings my mind back to reality, as suddenly the severity of my predicament is once again revealed. My time is up, no matter how much I plead, this is it, the end.

"Time to get out of the pool now; lunch is ready."

"Aw mom, do I have too?"

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  1. Date: 10/6/2021 10:13:00 AM
    What a great work. I was on the edge of my seat lost with you on that makeshift raft. Enjoyed the funny ending and mom interrupting. lol
  1. Date: 10/30/2018 4:40:00 AM
    I was completely sucked in to that adventure, which turned into a - "please don't be an 'it was all a dream' cliche, please please please". But laughing at the child's imagination in the end. Well executed my friend, very well executed.
  1. Date: 6/4/2017 1:56:00 PM
    Love this! So cute, Chris!
  1. Date: 5/7/2017 3:19:00 PM
    Chris, this brings back the realities of childhood. From one purity to another.
  1. Date: 1/26/2017 10:41:00 AM
    WoW! Chris , this is really good. I wasn't expecting the twist at the end. The scene you painted felt so real. I could feel how alone your character felt. I thought he was stuck in the big sea about to die. And boom, a kid sure can have a vivid imagination. You have penned an excellent piece of poetry my friend:-) Alexis
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