Zombie Lust

Cloaked within his dark wings; watchful warrior eyes. Surcharged face, figure in surreal ecstasy. Taken by the ultimate beastly desire; You yield held in his powerful libido. Saliva dribbles; mocked and caged to adjust He performs to trick and pleasure your torso. Leading you to respond to his love challenge Falling head over heals to his seduction. The Black Knight cajoles the fire to ignite; Burning you tremble and quiver to his demand. Picture Prompt:- http://www.feebleminds-gifs.com/incubus-zombies.jpg

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Jai Garg

Date: 4/11/2009 9:49:00 PM

Lol, I did not know the meaning of 'vertigo'; meaning dizziness. 'Seduce' 1. persuade to do something unwise 2. tempt into sexual activity. I hope you will understant the fine point in the word use. The second word 'might' strength, power. 'Demand' insist, command. Might use would suggest the woman need or wish is overruled. 'Demand' would shift the thought more a consensual behavior. It was nice to get the suggestions and as a man I would prefer 'might'.

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 4/11/2009 6:51:00 AM

Beautifully structured...May suggest these two words: to his vertigo...replacing seduction; and to his might...replacing demand...Please re-entry your beautiful poetry..a free advice. Happy Easter. All the best.