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I've always Adored "The Shadow of Your Smile" so here is the version I like best by Tony Bennet.

I tried to use the same number of syllables and meter in my new version of this song: Your Brown Eyes Flecked with Gold."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IQS_NyR7qqM  *as sung by Tony Bennet

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BDhJCExp7tI  (as sung by Connie Francis)

One winter’s day we walked in snow as twilight kissed the sky. And though it was so long ago I still try not to cry. I think about the way that you looked; that image of you I hold inside my mind until this day - Those brown eyes flecked with gold. . . Your brown eyes flecked with gold so warmed my heart I never could have thought we’d ever part. How I pray that you still think of me anywhere that you, my love, might be. Upon your face I wish once more to gaze - To see your eyes that shine like summer days! I’ll recall when times grow cold how I felt that day we strolled, and I never can forget your brown eyes flecked with gold. First posted 4/20/16 For John Hamilton's Write a love song Poetry Contest Based on the song "The Shadow of Your Smile"
LYrics (as sung by Tony Bennet: One day we walked along the sand One day in early spring You held a piper in your hand To mend its broken wing Now I'll remember many a day And many a lonely mile The echo of a piper's song The shadow of a smile The shadow of your smile When you are gone Will color all my dreams And light the dawn Look into my eyes My love and see All the lovely things You are to me Our wistful little star Was far too high A teardrop kissed your lips And so did I Now when I remember spring All the joy that love can bring I will be remembering The shadow of your smile

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 7/15/2017 10:37:00 PM
Congrats, Andrea on your lovely lyrics!
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Date: 7/15/2017 8:57:00 PM
This is special, just loved it, congrats Andrea on another great win!
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Date: 7/15/2017 8:58:00 PM
Just noticed this won before, see it must be good to win two times first place, I know good when I see it!
Date: 7/15/2017 8:36:00 PM
Beautiful, Andrea, I tried but couldn't get into it. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 5/3/2016 6:07:00 AM
A Well deserved Top Spot
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Date: 4/27/2016 1:14:00 PM
Gosh, that singer sure has a velvet voice. Great inspiration and I adore that title ... I think you'd have to be really close to notice those "flecks of gold" ;) ...
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Date: 4/27/2016 7:27:00 AM
Truly born to write lyrics sis, and I sure wish someone would find you and have you do this for them.
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Date: 4/25/2016 3:50:00 AM
Congrats Andrea, for your first placement with this beautiful, lyrical piece!!! ;-)
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Date: 4/24/2016 11:50:00 PM
Congrats on your top win, Andrea.
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Date: 4/22/2016 5:13:00 PM
Well done my poetic friend..a perfect fit..
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Date: 4/22/2016 6:48:00 AM
Hi Andrea just going through the winners page for the contest now, so once again, Congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. This write is deserving of another seven for sure. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 4/22/2016 4:34:00 AM
Really beautiful Andrea.. much congrats on top podium!!
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Date: 4/21/2016 5:32:00 PM
You won the contest with this beauty Andrea, cannot and will not argue with that...wonderful song,
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Date: 4/21/2016 3:58:00 PM
Hi Andrea, exactly where i would expect you to be, at the top. Congratulations on your win in the contest. A beautiful write from your golden pen. The gentle words just sing there way into the heart, stirring emotions deep within. This is an excellent write. This is a seven and has to be a fave. This is a dream to behold. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 4/21/2016 3:22:00 PM
Sounds like a number one song to me!
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Date: 4/21/2016 3:05:00 PM
The eyes have it. I don't know the song, but I dig your lyrics. Love, daver
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Date: 4/21/2016 2:55:00 PM
Beautiful all over Andrea!
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Date: 4/21/2016 1:17:00 PM
Andrea, this poem is wonderfully romantic and reads like a song. I see why it took top honors. Congratulations on your deserving first placement! #7 ; )
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Date: 4/21/2016 1:04:00 PM
So beautifully done Andrea, congratulations on your win...
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Date: 4/21/2016 1:03:00 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on ur win with 1st position. Wish u nice days ahead..............with love.
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Date: 4/21/2016 11:49:00 AM
beautiful well done on your win stephen
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Date: 4/21/2016 11:04:00 AM
Number one on soup as I predicted- now you just need to get it recorded Andrea:-) many congrats my friend:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/21/2016 10:09:00 AM
Hi Andrea, congratulations on your First Place win in the 'golden oldies' contest. Beautifully written! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 4/21/2016 9:46:00 AM
Congratulation my lovely friend on your superb win. Loved always, bl
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Date: 4/21/2016 9:17:00 AM
hi andrea, very lyrical indeed, lovely words, flows well - congrats on your top win in the contest! to answer your question about my water poem, it is based on a true murder case of a couple of years ago, and the victim just happened to have anorexia
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Date: 4/21/2016 9:05:00 AM
Congrats on your 1st place win Andrea
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