Andrea Travis Poet Sonnet

Young Jack

You blush sweetly, under hand
As I study for your reaction
I am getting my satisfaction
But no headway made on land
Can you repel your comfort
As true compliment is paid
Searching for connection made
Ships to dock at port
Intrigues your youth to me
Subtle tension in your shy smile
Dare I go to far, I dare to see
Clinging to charm and wile
The electric sent, it grabbed for me
I can only dream, just for awhile

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Dan Kearley July 29, 2013 at 11:46 AM I like this... It has a little cuteness to it.

Andrea Dietrich July 28, 2013 at 7:29 AM Hi, Andrea, this is an interesting one. I like the "subtle tension" of this one. It is not really a sonnet, but it is a great little rhyming poem. You should just call it rhyme! I like how you finished with "I can only dream, just for awhile" Many things in life make us feel that way!! Andrea Travis July 29, 2013 at 8:14 PM Thanks for your help on this first sonnet, i was trying to learn Petrarchan and Shakepearean. I forgot the final couplet! I took the scheme from Browning. Learning from a book on my own , so all help is really appreciated! I know I can do better, thanks for the comment! Love your work!