Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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~awarded 3rd place~
~awarded 1st place by Carol Eastman~

 

You Light Up My Life

You are the light of my world my precious son 
filled my days with happiness and fun. 
Always smiling, never blue 
how quickly you grew. 
Pure delight 
you
shine so bright. 
Strive in all you do 
now, and for your whole life through. 
Spread your wings and fly; my job is done. 
You are the light of my world my precious son 

02~13~15
Contest – An Invented Form – Andrea Dietrich
syllables checked 11,9,7,5,3,1,3,5,7,9,11
name of new form - mission almost impossible!

Entered in any poem written in 2015 contest sponsored by Laura Loo

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Line Gauthier June 9, 2018 at 9:48 PM Lovely, Jan. Congrats on your well deserved win. Jan Allison June 10, 2018 at 4:10 AM Thanks Line and my son is coming home on 28th, I've not seen him since 3rd January can't wait to give him a massive hug:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Gentry May 31, 2018 at 10:50 PM Congratulations on your win with this beautiful tribute to your son! Jan Allison June 3, 2018 at 2:23 PM Thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Line Gauthier November 10, 2017 at 11:09 PM Well done. Wonderful poem. Jan Allison November 11, 2017 at 5:29 AM It's a very special poem to me Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White September 15, 2016 at 7:40 AM Just so incredibly beautiful Jan :) Hugs! Jan Allison September 15, 2016 at 7:43 AM Thanks Darren it was quite a challenge to write with the rhyme and syllable restriction:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Merryman July 20, 2016 at 7:16 PM A sweet tribute to your son, Jan! Congrats on your win! Blessings! Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 2:25 AM Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath July 18, 2016 at 10:45 AM An invaluable diamond poem. Congrats on your win my lovely smiling friend. A beautiful 7. Loved always, bl Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 2:24 AM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs July 16, 2016 at 11:14 PM Great Job! Congrats :) Jan Allison July 17, 2016 at 4:18 AM Thanks Ed:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus July 16, 2016 at 4:11 PM The first time I read this poem I was much impressed by it, Jan...still am:) Congratulations on this worthy win! Hugs // paul Jan Allison July 17, 2016 at 4:18 AM Thanks Paul it's one of my favourite poems as it is a bout my lovely son - it took me about 3 hours to write as it was a challenging form:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars July 16, 2016 at 2:18 PM Jan, what a difficult form you tackled lady! I always enjoy poems about your son...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo Jan Allison July 16, 2016 at 2:24 PM Thanks LuLoo I think this poem took me about 3 hours to write it was SUCH a challenge - am so glad to get more exposure to it through your contest:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 19, 2015 at 11:36 PM Wow Jan thats awesome my dear! Congrats on big win! Jan Allison March 20, 2015 at 2:48 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A March 19, 2015 at 12:27 PM JAN, Congratulations on your awesome win..... Luv ~LINDA~ Jan Allison March 19, 2015 at 3:56 PM Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Gary Dye March 9, 2015 at 9:42 AM Awesome; I too have a son Jan Allison March 9, 2015 at 9:59 AM Being a parent is the best thing to ever happen to me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi February 28, 2015 at 8:23 AM Congratulations, on your win, Jan! Jan Allison February 28, 2015 at 8:28 AM Thanks so much Ralph - this poem is very special to me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A February 27, 2015 at 10:58 PM this is perfect Jan, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~ Jan Allison February 28, 2015 at 1:32 AM Thanks Skat the poem is for my son - he means the world to me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 24, 2015 at 12:34 AM Wonderful as ever Jan! Congrats on big win! Jan Allison February 24, 2015 at 2:04 AM Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Janet Eaton February 23, 2015 at 6:07 PM Wanted to stop in and congratulate you on your win. Way to go. This one really looked tough no way I was going to try it. Hud Janet Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 6:53 PM It was THE most challenging poem I have ever written Janet , it took me about 3 hours over 2 days - am delighted to be placed so well:-) Hugs Jan x

John Lawless February 23, 2015 at 5:21 PM Well Jan, I like your contest name suggestion. Your poem uses the form as the metaphor for time allowing you to use your words to become the sand of a life moving from birth to maturity. Excellently done, congrats on the win. Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 5:29 PM Thanks John this poem was a real challenge - and I love your wonderful interpretation of my simple words - thank you - you have made my day:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight February 23, 2015 at 4:19 PM Jan, stopping back to congratulate on your nice win for your beautiful poem. Number one for me! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 4:45 PM Thanks so much Sandra - the poem means the world to me as does my precious son:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper February 23, 2015 at 2:00 PM Back again to congratulate on your win. 7 Blessings dear friend Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 2:25 PM Thanks so much Eve:-) This poem is very special to me:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May February 23, 2015 at 11:48 AM Congrats on a great win Jan Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 12:02 PM Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs jan xx

Abdul Malik Mandani February 23, 2015 at 11:10 AM Very nice, Jan. Way to go! Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 12:01 PM Thanks Abdul:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards February 23, 2015 at 9:57 AM Such a beautiful tribute to motherhood, and as warm as a hug! This is lovely, and what a wonderful picture to enhance it! Congratulations, Jan! Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 12:01 PM Thanks Carrie - I found this such a challenge and am delighted to place so well:-) Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2015 at 7:57 AM Nice! Congratulations Jan! Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 12:00 PM Thanks so much Richard:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance February 23, 2015 at 7:37 AM Aww! Wonderful. Many applause for contest win and warm write :) Hugsxxx Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 12:00 PM Thanks Cas:-) love and hugs my friend:-) Jan xx

Shane Cooper February 23, 2015 at 1:28 AM Congratulations on your win Jan. It was a fantastic poem about David. love Shane xxx Shane Cooper February 23, 2015 at 1:34 AM He will and it will bring him tears of joy to be reminded of how very much you love him. love Shane xxx :-) Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 1:31 AM Thanks Shane - I hope he reads it one day:-) Hugs jan xx

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