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You Leave Me Breathless

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[A basic Ballade is a form of French lyric poetry that has 14 lines and is split into four stanzas using the following format: aabR aabR aabR bR.]

I am breathless thinking of your sighs, Your sweet whispers with twinkling eyes No way your smile I could ever forget, That special day when first we met. You left me breathless hearing you say That we were meant to meet that day, Then, darling, I knew I would never regret That special day when first we met. Breathless reliving the golden years-- Yes, reliving the laughter and the tears The first words you spoke I’ll never forget That special day when first we met. Not in a million years could I ever forget That special day when first we met. FIRST PLACE WINNER written December 22, 2021 especially for "B Forms - 10 Lines" Poetry Contest sponsored by Constance La France

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Constance La France

Date: 1/20/2022 10:55:00 AM

Milt, congratulations on your First Place win in my contest B Forms with this beautiful poem ~Constance

L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/20/2022 11:10:00 AM

Thank you, Constance. I really enjoyed your contest. I hope you will continue with more of this kind.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/11/2022 7:57:00 AM

The most poignant (because a mature love is so much richer): Breathless reliving the golden years-- Yes, reliving the laughter and the tears//Congratulations, Milton!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/11/2022 3:57:00 PM

Thanks so much, Kim. I am back home and will soon be up to speed. Thanks so much for your concern and your note. I have been on a two-week tour of the southern U.S. visiting family and friends. I did sign into PS a few times, but I don't enjoy doing so with my cell phone. I am home, as of an hour ago, and you will begin to see me posting poems, commenting, and responding to comments right away. Again, thanks for your concern. Your Kentucky Friend, Milt

Christuraj Alex

Date: 1/10/2022 8:08:00 PM

Great ballad. "I am breathless thinking of your sighs" - Beautiful beginning. The whole poem is beautiful. Congratulations!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/11/2022 3:57:00 PM

Thank you so much, Christuraj. I really appreciate your thoughts.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/10/2022 7:17:00 PM

A beautiful poem, Milton, congratulations:)

L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/11/2022 3:57:00 PM

Thanks, Jo. I'm back home and frantically trying to catch up. I so appreciate your comment on my poem.

Marilene Evans

Date: 1/10/2022 4:01:00 PM

So tender and romantic. Congratulations! Where are you? Are you OK, have not seen any recent post from you. Be safe and stay safe.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 1/10/2022 7:41:00 PM

I’m fine, Marilene. I’ve been on a road trip throughout the southern US without my computer! Will be home this week and renew my PS activity. Thanks so much for inquiring.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 12/23/2021 8:27:00 PM

Romance in nostalgia! Beautiful! Interesting form … Ballade, I must give it a shot

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 12/24/2021 1:21:00 AM

Well, I’ve made a feeble attempt at the PS defined conventional form. I found it a bit challenging

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 12/23/2021 11:50:00 PM

Seems more like a rhyme sequence- aabR ccbR ddbR bR ~ you’ve used?

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/23/2021 8:35:00 PM

Please do, Unseeking Seeker. I don't see enough of them. But, keep in mind, the ballade can take many, many forms...long and short...I prefer the basic form, which I employed here. I'm waiting!!!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/23/2021 4:04:00 AM

Delightful, charming words of love and affection, Milton. A meaningful ode that honors the beloved.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/23/2021 8:36:00 PM

Thank you so much, Vijay. I hope to see more of them since they are possible in Constance's contest.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/23/2021 12:48:00 AM

This is breathlessly romantic.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/23/2021 8:37:00 PM

Aw, thanks, Caren. I found it fairly easy to write, once I figured it out. This is a short, basic ballade, but there are many variations. Somewhat like a Rondel, I think.

Deb M

Date: 12/22/2021 8:39:00 PM

Sir Milton you write a mighty fine romantic heartfelt poem….just lovely! Debx

L Milton Hankins
Date: 12/22/2021 9:22:00 PM

Thanks so much, Deb. I do try!