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You Cripple Me

You cripple me, I fall into you hard, Abandoning motion. You deafen me, I fall into the sounds of you, Neglecting to hear those of the world. You mute me, I fall into the allure of your words, Disregarding my own. You blind me, I fall into the beauty that surrounds you, Forgetting to see anything else. You render me useless, I fall out of myself completely, Forming an extension of you. You leave me, I fall into the empty void, Always allowing space for you.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 1/28/2013 2:08:00 PM
Honestly Jessica, this is what I call poetry. I call this form free-verse. You first captured my attention with the first line title. I gave the proper emotions when one is head over heels *IN LOVE*... I like the way you kept the space, that keeps you hypnotize. I also like the way you short cut all your sentence, with awesome falling metaphors. Mostly I like the way I followed the image on LINE # 7, 8 and 9... *always~ :-) PD
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Jessica Goldstone
Date: 1/28/2013 2:27:00 PM
Thank You PD. :) I sincerely appreciate your comment.xx
Date: 1/13/2013 8:48:00 AM
This captured my heartstrings.
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Date: 1/12/2013 3:01:00 PM
ahhh...the extreme moments of love are so descriptive in your verse... Enjoyed !!
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Jessica Goldstone
Date: 1/12/2013 3:09:00 PM
Thank You so much Debra, I appreciate your comments very much.

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