Kim Van Breda Poet Heroic Couplet

Written In the Sand

WRITTEN IN THE SAND

The Big Five—Africa’s pride in the vast open wild
Buffalo, Rhinoceros, Elephant, Leopard and Lion
Their prey—scattered Impala, Kudu and Waterbuck
On hardened dust… their footprints prevail and stand

WRITTEN IN THE SAND

The proposal day--- carefully planned- a beautiful beach
Red Roses, a Picnic, Sunrise and Diamond ring
The petals—scattered on the soft damp sea tabloid
Lover’s plea….a stick his pen, “Marry me—take my hand”

WRITTEN IN THE SAND

Early one morning--- He entered the dusty temple to teach
Scribes and Pharisees brought her in—an adulterous
Large stones…scattered for all to throw and accuse
Jesus bent down… wrote with His finger on condemning land

What was His message…..?

WRITTEN IN THE SAND

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Freddie Robinson Jr. October 11, 2016 at 10:50 AM Excellent poem, Kim! Very thought provoking. I love how you interwove the theme of nature, personal, and spiritual into one cohesive piece. Very impressive poetic tapestry. Very, very well done. Must read more of your work. Love and peace.

Patrick Nigros May 26, 2015 at 9:37 AM WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.......... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Theologians can all Marvel at this Writing... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! loving it Kim.... WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tim Ryerson September 8, 2014 at 4:23 AM I know that passage from the Bible...All I remember is that was the incident when He said: 'Let he who is without sin, let him cast the first stone'...Correct? I LOVE your method of using three titles for three wonderful verses! Go directly to my favs, do not pass go... Tim Ryerson September 8, 2014 at 4:24 AM Fav poet too...

Elizabeth Jubenville September 27, 2013 at 10:10 AM This is very nice poem Kim, very well done, I really enjoy reading this morning ..... with love.....Ellie Kim Van Breda September 27, 2013 at 12:37 PM Thank you Ellie for stopping by my posts. This poem inspired the title for my second poetry publication.. "Written in the Sand". a collection of Christian poetry.

Debbie Duncan August 16, 2013 at 12:17 AM very nicely done Kim ;}

Rosy Love August 1, 2013 at 7:52 PM Beautiful and captivating, especially stanza 2, love it! :)

Ravi Sathasivam July 17, 2013 at 11:33 PM Excellent. Outstanding write. Enjoyed. Tfs

Sara Kendrick July 17, 2013 at 1:16 PM I think that he started writing The Ten Commandmets..We have all broken at least one of them in our lifetime that is if we really soul search..Great work..Unexpected last stanza..Thanks for stopping by..Yes, my cat brings me half eaten squirrel, chipmonk, birds, and field rats..Sara

Kim Van Breda July 17, 2013 at 8:36 AM Thanks Tim... you really know your Bible well. I think this is the scripture where He wrote in the sand-- never mentioned what was written. Perhaps same part of the Word that talks about the line in the sand --John 8:6. The second stanza was inspired by the way my son has just recently proposed to his fiancé.. the true romantic !! I must have done something right bringing him up :)

Tim Ryerson July 17, 2013 at 8:24 AM 'He who is without sin, let him cast the first stone', right?...One of the greatest quotes from Jesus Christ our Saviour and Redeemer...He definitely drew the ultimate 'line in the sand' there didn't he?...LOVE the way you wrote this poem as three separate poems, each with the same title..Gotta say that in my humble opinion, this is your best effort (so far!) - Tim

Poet. Undertaker July 17, 2013 at 6:28 AM love love and love. great!

Honestly J.T. July 16, 2013 at 8:57 PM I like how you put this one together

Donna Jones July 16, 2013 at 5:00 PM Kim your poetry is always as beautiful as you are...and I'm sure the message was one of love...anyway I've always thought so...great message.... Kim Van Breda July 17, 2013 at 8:38 AM Thanks Donna-- love your poetry too. :)

Juli- Michelle July 16, 2013 at 2:28 PM The last reference is my favorite. I have always wondered what Christ wrote in the ground after the men approached him with the sinful woman. I imagine its something simple and beautiful.

Nette Onclaud July 16, 2013 at 1:37 PM eloquent portrayals of a vow marked in sand... love rules; so beautiful, kim..:) huggs Kim Van Breda July 17, 2013 at 8:37 AM Thank you from a talented poetess as yourself.

Isaiah Zerbst July 16, 2013 at 10:49 AM Astounding thoughts on sand! The very epitome of creative imagery! I shall add this poem to my faves. ~ I thank you for your very nice comments to my work. Kim Van Breda July 16, 2013 at 12:13 PM Thanks Isaiah-- your input on my Christian based contributions is always appreciated. Your work deems the same response.

Poet Tacito July 16, 2013 at 7:59 AM Outstanding perspectives here. It's stunning how one piece of land can contain polar opposites of memories and its impact. Excellent job! Poet Tacito July 16, 2013 at 2:23 PM How exciting!!!!! Congrats to them both!!!!!!! I know you were probably a TAD ecstatic. :) Kim Van Breda July 16, 2013 at 12:15 PM Thanks Drake As always... I value your input. This poem was inspired by John 8 :6 in the Bible along with the way my son proposed to his fiancé last month.