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Wrestling With Uncertainty

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A face in a crowd grows numb on the subway which hides evening’s woe, then closes a day, mirroring grief across late Autumn’s sky to wrestle with angst she cannot deny like one thorn circling down from a fogged lair while hours pound this final ache quite unfair. Her dream turns bleak through uncertainty’s flow, it knows not which compass of life to go… frightened to death , brushing sleets of mad rain when a long gone illness comes back again; like time’s flick winging a dark raven’s plume as sallow hands collect flowers abloom. But oh this wish to live stirs ever on, for when litanies of prayer are done each whisper tumbles as moonbeams abide… while nights claim her dream, “ fate is in your side.” 5/4/2016 Silent One’s Contest: Lyrics Cliché Image Inspiration from the lyrics ‘ Mad World’ Cliché ,’ Frightened To Death’ … Image # 5

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Date: 5/15/2016 11:50:00 AM
Work of art....congrats Nette
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Date: 5/14/2016 5:22:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 5/14/2016 10:56:00 AM
C O N G R A T U L A T I O N S !! on your wonderful win in the contest
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Date: 5/14/2016 10:30:00 AM
Congrats on a terrific poem and placement, Nette. ~kc~
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Date: 5/5/2016 10:55:00 AM
Beautiful poem my lovely friend. Wishing you good luck. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/4/2016 4:06:00 PM
WEll done, Nette. I think you will have scored a home run with this one! Love how you were inspired by Mad World. That song is SO awesome.
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Date: 5/4/2016 11:55:00 AM
Reads like a winner to me.. Great contest entry..Good to know fate is on her side in light of a horrible illness..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 5/4/2016 2:59:00 AM
Excellent. Very moving write. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing it
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Date: 5/4/2016 1:06:00 AM
A truly moving piece! Good luck in the contest Nette!
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Date: 5/3/2016 2:57:00 PM
The pic itself speaks volumes and with your write it shouts out a dark truth! Line #8 grabs me! The best to you in this contest!
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Date: 5/3/2016 1:21:00 PM
- This is a dark side of an mad world - Great written for this contest, Nette - Good luck - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/3/2016 1:12:00 PM
There is a conflict between how beautifully written this is, and how devastating the implications of the message are. I will forever be awed by the strength that some people possess, and their sheer grit to overcome. Good luck in the contest. It get's a 7 from me. -G
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Date: 5/3/2016 12:01:00 PM
Well written. I really like the way you used the words.
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