Wordsworth's Daffodils

One spring morning, William and his sister Dorothy stroll through the woods and arrive at the lake. As usual, they pause to admire the scenery. The hills surrounding the tranquil stretch of water are beautiful, but some daffodils impress them most. 

golden daffodils
sway in the gentle breeze - -
an artist sketches

Dorothy finishes her sketch and decides to also describe them in her diary entry for the day. William feels inspired to write a poem.

For Deb’s Spring haibun contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 6/19/2013 2:25:00 AM
whenever sombody attempts of daffodils wordsworth comes to our mind. great. feels like won't it go little longer
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Date: 3/7/2013 4:00:00 PM
((()))!!!Congrats on your great win..Sara
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Date: 3/6/2013 8:01:00 PM
: ) Warm congratulations on your win, Jack! Enjoyed the story, and wish you'd expand it someday!! Always, Annalise
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Date: 3/6/2013 5:46:00 PM
The simplicity of this is stunning....I truly love the picture you have painted!!
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Date: 3/6/2013 2:48:00 PM
well, I need to go to the list and see what placement you got with this one, and I am so glad to see from below's comments that you ARE on the list. Congrats!! I really liked your succinct poem. So I see you have been busy here. Keep it up, Jack. I know it's difficult to make time for Soup, but it's so fun to see you here.
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Date: 3/6/2013 1:36:00 PM
Enjoyable prose and what a great haiku !! Congrats on your win !! I spotted the first daffodils of spring near the edge of the woods...where an old house use to stand. What a joy to see !!
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Date: 3/6/2013 10:57:00 AM
This spin on the contest is my favorite. Congratulations on the win.
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Date: 3/5/2013 9:41:00 PM
Jack, ;-) Congratulations with your nice winning poem in Debbie's "Spring haibun" contest... xox~LINDA
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Date: 3/5/2013 7:13:00 PM
VERY nice haiku..I would have liked some more story? grin..I'm greedy! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 3/1/2013 11:01:00 AM
Love your haiku on this poem. I am still learning haiku on face book with Deb and Caroline who correct me when I am wrong. It is a learning process. I am to emotional so that gets in the way. I always think freeze the moment. soup mail
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Date: 2/17/2013 4:39:00 PM
and yours isn't to bad either jack.. love how you have structure this.. amazing Haiku...
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Date: 2/15/2013 9:10:00 AM
I love Wordsworth! This is such a unique spin on Debbie's contest. I love that you made it a story about a famous poet. Your haiku is fantastic.
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Date: 2/15/2013 12:06:00 AM
and thanks for all the look-see's at my poems today. Luv, Andrea (as you can see it's after midnight and I am still here. Just want to get back to bed , haha, but I have read some really nice poems tonight that made it worthwhile)
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Date: 2/14/2013 1:36:00 PM
I really liked the uncomplicated way of this Jack..really smooth reading "good" take care Joe..)
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Date: 2/13/2013 4:01:00 PM
Very lovely and love the imagery...the daffofils in full bloom, the gentle breeze as they sway...Great job, Jack! Always, Annalise
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Date: 2/13/2013 3:25:00 PM
And so this would be the poem that he was inspired to write. I loved reading this delightful tale of a poem my friend! What an awesome piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 2/13/2013 2:35:00 PM
oh, so William had a sister named dorothy, huh? I did not know that. Very nicely done and I just love your haiku~ soupmail. something very funny to tell you.
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Date: 2/13/2013 11:36:00 AM
REads like a winner for Deb's contest..She has had a great response with some very good works..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 2/13/2013 9:10:00 AM
A nice poem! I was able to actually picture and feel almost every word that you wrote. Thanks for stopping by and viewing my Valentine's poem. Have a beautiful day! Simmplissity=Patricia Lewis
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